Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains some incorrect words, such as 'manatee' instead of 'melody' or 'singing'. Try to use clear and relevant vocabulary, and avoid grammatical errors. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me to relax and relieve stress. Singing joyful melodies makes me feel happy and refreshed.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct grammar and vocabulary to explain your experience with singing lessons.

例: Yes, I learnt how to sing when I was in college. My wife is a music teacher, and she taught me some vocal techniques to improve my singing skills.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and use linking words to connect your ideas. Be specific about who you want to sing for and why.

例: I would like to sing for my friends, especially during karaoke sessions. Singing together creates a fun and happy atmosphere where everyone feels comfortable and enjoys the moment.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains incorrect word choices like 'manatee'. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct vocabulary and grammar. Provide specific reasons to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them express their emotions and feel more relaxed, especially when they are feeling down.

× I really like singing, specially in great melody.

✓ I really like singing, especially in great melody.

The word 'specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'especially' when emphasizing a particular aspect. 'Specially' means 'for a special purpose' and is less common in this context.

× Because the manatee can help people to relieve some stress.

✓ Because singing can help people to relieve some stress.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'manatee' which is unrelated to the context. The sentence is also a fragment starting with 'Because' without a main clause. It should be connected properly to the previous sentence or rephrased.

× An I feel joyful.

✓ And I feel joyful.

The word 'An' is a typo or incorrect use; it should be 'And' to connect the sentence properly.

× Yes, in when I'm in a college I am a quiet team.

✓ Yes, when I was in college, I was a quiet person.

The sentence has incorrect word order and unclear meaning. 'In when I'm in a college' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was in college'. 'I am a quiet team' is incorrect; likely intended 'I was a quiet person'.

× And my wife also is a music teacher, so is she teach me a notch of technique like the vocal technique and.

✓ And my wife is also a music teacher, so she teaches me some techniques like vocal techniques.

The sentence has incorrect word order and verb form. 'so is she teach me' should be 'so she teaches me'. 'a notch of technique' is incorrect; 'some techniques' is appropriate.

× And this voice support any?

✓ And does this voice support anything?

The sentence is a question but lacks auxiliary verb and proper structure. It should be 'Does this voice support anything?' to form a correct question.

× I would like to thank for my friend.

✓ I would like to thank my friend.

The verb 'thank' does not require the preposition 'for' when followed by the person being thanked.

× Specially in a karaoke because.

✓ Especially in karaoke because

'Specially' should be 'especially' to indicate emphasis. Also, 'a karaoke' is incorrect; 'karaoke' is uncountable here and does not need an article.

× They have a great time with friends, an more hapiness in that moment and no one judged you.

✓ They have a great time with friends, more happiness in that moment, and no one judges you.

The sentence has spelling errors ('an' should be 'and', 'hapiness' should be 'happiness'), tense inconsistency ('judged' should be 'judges' to match present tense), and missing commas for clarity.

× Yes, I think it can bring some happiness to people because the.

✓ Yes, I think it can bring some happiness to people because

The sentence ends abruptly with 'because the.' which is incomplete and unclear. It should be completed or rephrased.

× Manatee can make the people feel joyfulness because some people when he is very done then will feel more comfortable.

✓ Singing can make people feel joyful because when someone is very down, they will feel more comfortable.

'Manatee' is incorrect and unrelated; 'singing' fits the context. 'Joyfulness' is better replaced with 'joyful'. 'He is very done' is incorrect; 'someone is very down' is appropriate. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.