Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite natural and relevant, but it has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to be more concise and correct your grammar, for example, avoid phrases like 'am won't to relax' which is incorrect. Also, limit your answer to about 3-4 sentences for clarity.

例: I enjoy singing even though I'm not very skilled at it. Whenever I feel low or need to relax, singing helps me feel better and lifts my mood.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes, such as 'syncing' instead of 'singing'. Also, avoid starting sentences with 'And'. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific.

例: Yes, I tried learning to sing several times as a child, although I didn't know much about singing techniques. Singing many songs helped me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: Your answer is heartfelt but a bit long and repetitive. Try to use linking words like 'because' to connect your ideas and avoid repeating phrases like 'the only person'. Also, check subject-verb agreement, e.g., 'she stands by me'.

例: If I had the chance, I would sing for my best friend because she always supports me and cheers me up when I feel stressed from my studies.

提案: Your answer shows your opinion clearly but has grammatical errors and redundancy. Avoid repeating words like 'just' and phrases like 'do do their work'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific reasons.

例: Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people because it helps reduce stress and lifts their mood when they feel low or depressed. It is a great way to heal emotionally.

× Sometimes whenever I'm feeling low or am won't to relax for a bit then I like to sing.

✓ Sometimes whenever I'm feeling low or want to relax for a bit, then I like to sing.

The phrase 'am won't' is incorrect. The correct form is 'want' without 'am'. 'Want' is a verb and does not require 'am' before it. The error is due to incorrect verb form usage.

× I did this quite a few times when I was a kid as I didn't know anything about syncing but I used to sing a lot of songs.

✓ I did this quite a few times when I was a kid as I didn't know anything about singing but I used to sing a lot of songs.

The word 'syncing' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'singing'. 'Syncing' means synchronizing, which is unrelated to singing. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar tense error, but it affects the sentence meaning.

× she is the only person who stand by me.

✓ she is the only person who stands by me.

The verb 'stand' should be in third person singular form 'stands' to agree with the singular subject 'who' referring to 'person'. This is a subject-verb agreement error.

× It just singing just makes people happy whenever their stress and their feeling low do do their work.

✓ Singing just makes people happy whenever they are stressed or feeling low while doing their work.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and awkward structure. 'Their stress' should be 'they are stressed' and 'their feeling low' should be 'feeling low'. Also, 'do do' is a repetition error. The correction improves pronoun use and sentence clarity.

× Or their feeling stressed or depressed. Singing is a great way to heal themselves.

✓ When they are feeling stressed or depressed, singing is a great way to heal themselves.

The original sentence fragment 'Or their feeling stressed or depressed.' is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb. Combining it with the next sentence and adding proper structure corrects the error.