Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains several pronunciation errors ('saying' instead of 'singing') and some grammatical mistakes. Try to use correct vocabulary and grammar to make your answer clearer. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. For instance, when I feel stressed, singing my favourite songs instantly lifts my mood. Moreover, it is a great way to connect with friends during social gatherings. To be honest, I often sing in the bathroom as it feels comfortable and private.

提案: There are several grammatical errors and incorrect word choices in your answer, such as 'I've took saying horses' which is unclear. Make sure to use correct verb forms and vocabulary. Also, try to provide more specific details about your singing lessons and reasons for stopping, using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I have taken singing lessons before. I used to attend classes every weekend to practise singing. However, I had to stop because I became too busy with my schoolwork. Although I enjoyed the lessons, my studies took priority at that time.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to form complete sentences and use appropriate verb tenses. Also, provide more specific details about the kind of audience you want to sing for, and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: I would like to sing for people who truly appreciate my music. If someone invited me to perform, I would be more than happy to sing for them. Singing for an appreciative audience motivates me to do my best.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to use correct sentence structures and clearer vocabulary. Also, explain your ideas more specifically and use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: In my opinion, singing definitely brings happiness to people because it helps relieve stress from the day. However, some people might not enjoy singing as much, so their experience could be different. Overall, singing can be a helpful way to improve mood for many individuals.

× Yeah, I'm really into saying because it helps me relax and express my emotions.

✓ Yeah, I'm really into singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions.

The word 'saying' is incorrect here; the correct present participle form of the verb 'sing' is 'singing'. 'Saying' means to speak words, which does not fit the context of enjoying the activity of singing.

× For example, when I feeling stressed, saying my favorite songs instantly lifts my mood.

✓ For example, when I feel stressed, singing my favorite songs instantly lifts my mood.

The phrase 'when I feeling stressed' is incorrect because the verb 'feel' should be in the base form 'feel' after 'when' to indicate present tense. Also, 'saying' should be 'singing' as explained before.

× Additionally, it's a fun way to connect with others during social gatherings and to be honest, I. Actually really enjoy seeing in the bathroom when I am.

✓ Additionally, it's a fun way to connect with others during social gatherings and to be honest, I actually really enjoy singing in the bathroom when I am.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing' to match the context of the activity being discussed. Also, the sentence was fragmented with a misplaced period after 'I' which has been corrected.

× Yeah, I've took saying horses before an I went there every weekend to practice my saying, but then I gave up unfortunately 'cause I was too busy with my school work.

✓ Yeah, I've taken singing courses before and I went there every weekend to practice my singing, but then I gave up unfortunately because I was too busy with my school work.

The phrase 'I've took' is incorrect; the correct past participle form is 'I've taken'. 'Saying horses' is a mishearing or typo for 'singing courses'. Also, 'an' should be 'and', and 'saying' should be 'singing'.

× I mean, I really want to sing for someone who really appreciates my music an.

✓ I mean, I really want to sing for someone who really appreciates my music.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'an' which is incorrect and unnecessary. Removing it completes the sentence properly.

× If somebody finds me and asked me to sing songs and I will be more than willing to do that.

✓ If somebody finds me and asks me to sing songs, I will be more than willing to do that.

The verb 'asked' should be in present tense 'asks' to agree with 'finds' in the conditional clause. Also, a comma is needed before the main clause for clarity.

× From my point of view, definitely yes, it helps you too. Relieve your pressure from the day and it is so helpful.

✓ From my point of view, definitely yes, it helps you to relieve your pressure from the day and it is so helpful.

The phrase 'Relieve your pressure from the day' is a sentence fragment and lacks a subject. It should be connected to the previous sentence with 'to' to form the infinitive 'helps you to relieve'.

× But for others, if they are not really kind of the same person, then I would say it will be a different case for them.

✓ But for others, if they are not really the same kind of person, then I would say it will be a different case for them.

The phrase 'not really kind of the same person' is awkward and incorrect. The correct phrase is 'not really the same kind of person' to express difference in type or preference.