Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tapai ko uttar ma kehi bhul haru chan jasle English ko prakritik prayog ma asar parcha. Tapai le 'Is I' ko sato 'I' bhannu parcha ra 'lips my mood' ko sato 'lifts my mood' bhannu parcha. Arko kura, tapai le sentence haru lai thik tarikale jodne linking words prayog garnu parcha jastai 'and', 'also', 'because' jasto shabda haru. Tapai ko uttar lai 3-4 sentence samma simit rakhnu parcha ra pratyek sentence ma spashta arth hunu parcha.

例: I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. For example, when I feel stressed, singing my favorite song instantly lifts my mood. Also, singing allows me to connect with others during social gatherings.

提案: Tapai ko uttar ma kehi spelling ra shabda prayog ma galti chan jastai 'toy' ko sato 'choir', 'Peace and Ryan at him' ko sato 'pitch and rhythm', 'lesion' ko sato 'lessons' bhannu parcha. Tapai le sentence haru lai spashta ra sanga jodne linking words prayog garnu parcha. Arko kura, tapai le sentence haru lai 3-4 sentence samma simit rakhnu parcha ra pratyek sentence ma spashta arth hunu parcha.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in school, I took part in a choir where I received basic vocal training and learned about pitch and rhythm. Singing has always been a passion of mine, and those lessons helped me improve my confidence and vocal control.

提案: Tapai ko uttar ma kehi spelling ra grammar ko galti chan jastai 'pills' ko sato 'feels', 'E food' ko sato 'effort', 'strain sour bound bond' ko sato 'strengthen our bond' bhannu parcha. Tapai le sentence haru lai thik tarikale jodne linking words prayog garnu parcha. Arko kura, tapai le sentence haru lai 3-4 sentence samma simit rakhnu parcha ra pratyek sentence ma spashta arth hunu parcha.

例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends. Singing for them feels special because they are supportive and appreciate my effort, which motivates me to perform better. Moreover, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

提案: Tapai ko uttar ma grammar ra shabda prayog ma galti chan jastai 'His' ko sato 'Yes', 'and' ko sato 'can', 'all those individuals' ko sato 'allows individuals', 'think their favorite sounds' ko sato 'sing their favorite songs', 'we are with others' ko sato 'we are with others' bhannu parcha. Tapai le sentence haru lai thik tarikale jodne linking words prayog garnu parcha. Arko kura, tapai le sentence haru lai 3-4 sentence samma simit rakhnu parcha ra pratyek sentence ma spashta arth hunu parcha.

例: Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people. Singing allows individuals to express their emotions and can be a great way to relieve stress. For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they sing their favorite songs, either alone or with others.

× Is I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotion.

✓ I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions.

The pronoun 'Is I' is incorrect; it should be 'I'. Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context of expressing feelings.

× For example, when I am feeling stressed singing my favorite song instantly lips my mood.

✓ For example, when I am feeling stressed, singing my favorite song instantly lifts my mood.

The sentence lacks a comma after the introductory clause and uses 'lips' instead of the correct verb 'lifts'. Proper punctuation and correct verb choice improve clarity.

× Additionally, it fan we do connect with others during social gatherings.

✓ Additionally, it can help us connect with others during social gatherings.

The phrase 'fan we do' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'can help us' to convey the intended meaning.

× When I was in school, I took part in a toy where I received basic vocal training and learn about Peace and Ryan at him.

✓ When I was in school, I took part in a choir where I received basic vocal training and learned about pitch and rhythm.

'toy' is a typo for 'choir'. 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned' to match the past context. 'Peace and Ryan at him' is incorrect and likely meant to be 'pitch and rhythm'.

× Singing has always been a passion of mine and those lesion helped me improve my confidence and local control.

✓ Singing has always been a passion of mine and those lessons helped me improve my confidence and vocal control.

'lesion' is a typo for 'lessons'. 'local control' should be 'vocal control' to correctly describe singing ability.

× I would like to sing for my family and close friends, Singing for them pills special because they are supportive and appreciate my E food, which motivates me to perform better.

✓ I would like to sing for my family and close friends. Singing for them feels special because they are supportive and appreciate my effort, which motivates me to perform better.

'pills' is a typo for 'feels'. 'E food' is incorrect and should be 'effort'. Also, the comma should be a period to separate sentences.

× Moreover, sharing music with love ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strain sour bound bond.

✓ Moreover, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

'love ones' should be 'loved ones'. 'strain sour bound bond' is incorrect; it should be 'strengthens our bond' to convey the intended meaning.

× His I believe singing and definitely bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people.

'His' is incorrect and should be 'Yes'. 'and' should be 'can' to correctly express ability.

× Singing all those individuals to express their emotion and can be a great way to relieve stress.

✓ Singing allows those individuals to express their emotions and can be a great way to relieve stress.

'all' should be 'allows'. 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context.

× For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they think their favorite sounds either alone we are with others.

✓ For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they listen to their favorite songs, either alone or with others.

'think' should be 'listen to'. 'sounds' should be 'songs'. 'we are' should be 'or' to correctly connect the options.