Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Try to start with a direct response, then explain your reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid repetition and ensure your sentences are complete and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express stories and emotions. Also, when I go to the gym, I play songs to boost my confidence and reduce stress.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Please organise your thoughts before speaking. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words like 'and' or 'because'. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear references.

例: Yes, I learnt how to sing when I was a teenager in Egypt. I even performed at a school concert, which was a great experience because many people appreciated my singing.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Try to clearly state who you want to sing for and why. Use simple sentences and linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons. Avoid unclear phrases and ensure correct grammar.

例: I want to sing for a popular Punjabi singer named Sidhu Moosewala because he was an inspiration to me. I would like to pay tribute to him through my singing.

提案: Your answer is on the right track but incomplete and repetitive. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words like 'because' and 'also' to connect ideas. Avoid filler words and ensure your sentences are complete.

例: Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because it reduces stress and improves their mood.

× Yes I all I like singing because it helps to tell stories I was stressing and also whenever we whenever I go to the gym I play songs because it also to boost our confidence also it makes us less stressed.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it helps to tell stories. I was stressed, and also whenever I go to the gym, I play songs because it helps to boost our confidence and makes us less stressed.

The original sentence is a run-on with missing punctuation and unclear structure. Breaking it into clear sentences improves understanding. Also, 'I was stressing' is incorrect; it should be 'I was stressed' to express the feeling. Adding missing verbs like 'helps' clarifies meaning.

× Well, when I was my teenage Egypt I used to learn how to sing and somehow I have performed a concert at a school as it was a good experience and many people like my shoulder as I did in my someone on my own and after that. Yeah, I learn how to.

✓ Well, when I was a teenager in Egypt, I used to learn how to sing and I performed a concert at school. It was a good experience, and many people liked my singing as I did it on my own. After that, I continued to learn how to sing.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and unclear phrases. 'I have performed' should be 'I performed' to match past narration. 'My shoulder' is incorrect; it should be 'my singing'. 'I learn how to' should be 'I continued to learn how to sing' to complete the thought. Also, 'teenage Egypt' is incorrect; it should be 'a teenager in Egypt'.

× Well I want to sing for a popular Punjabi singer which is soon as he was now dad and I would like to tribute to him before in my shoulder to visit because he was a very popular single and he was many as beatable. He was a inspiration for me and I would like to sing for him.

✓ Well, I want to sing for a popular Punjabi singer named Soonas, who is now deceased. I would like to pay tribute to him through my singing because he was a very popular singer and an inspiration for me. I would like to sing for him.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has unclear references. 'Which is soon as he was now dad' is unclear; corrected to 'named Soonas, who is now deceased'. 'Tribute to him before in my shoulder to visit' is incorrect; corrected to 'pay tribute to him through my singing'. 'He was many as beatable' is unclear and removed. Pronouns and references are clarified for meaning.

× Well, I definitely think that singing and bring happiness to people because it singing makes people less stressed and also make their mood change. And if uh, uh, I think that.

✓ Well, I definitely think that singing can bring happiness to people because singing makes people less stressed and also improves their mood.

The modal verb 'can' is needed to express possibility or ability ('singing can bring happiness'). Also, 'and bring' should be 'can bring'. The sentence is incomplete and redundant phrases are removed for clarity.