Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang alami dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta hindari penggunaan frasa yang tidak tepat seperti 'I have now beautiful voice'.

例: I don't really like singing because I'm not confident about my voice. However, I enjoy listening to others sing.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan hindari kata yang tidak tepat seperti 'my patient'.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing before, but I'm still not very confident because I need more practice.

提案: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi kalimatnya bisa dibuat lebih alami dan mengalir dengan penggunaan kata penghubung yang tepat.

例: I want to sing for my husband because I love him very much. Even though he can't sing, I still want to sing for him.

提案: Jawaban Anda sulit dipahami karena struktur kalimat yang tidak jelas dan penggunaan kata yang kurang tepat. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan teratur.

例: Yes, I think singing can make people happy. When we feel sad, listening to beautiful or cheerful songs can lift our spirits.

× I'm not confident with that because I have now beautiful voice, but I like hearing someone who is singing.

✓ I'm not confident about that because I don't have a beautiful voice now, but I like hearing someone who is singing.

The phrase 'confident with' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'confident about'. Also, 'have now beautiful voice' is incorrect; it should be 'don't have a beautiful voice now' to express the negative and proper word order.

× I ever learn how to sing? Yes absolutely. But I'm not really confident in this but my patient.

✓ Have I ever learned how to sing? Yes, absolutely. But I'm not really confident in this because of my patience.

The question 'I ever learn' is incorrect; the present perfect form 'Have I ever learned' is needed. Also, 'my patient' is incorrect; it should be 'my patience' to express the intended meaning.

× I wanna sing for my husband because I really love my husband. Although my husband is not a singer too and he cannot sing for me but I really want to sing for my husband.

✓ I want to sing for my husband because I really love him. Although my husband is not a singer and he cannot sing for me, I really want to sing for him.

Repetition of 'my husband' is unnecessary; pronouns 'him' should be used. Also, 'not a singer too' is incorrect; 'not a singer' suffices. The sentence structure is improved by replacing 'but' with a comma and 'and' for clarity.

× Definitely yes singing can bring happiness to people just like if we are not really happy where the day so we here or we seeing. The beautiful song or the spirit song so we can be spirit in happy.

✓ Definitely, yes, singing can bring happiness to people. For example, if we are not really happy during the day, when we hear or see a beautiful song or an inspiring song, we can feel happy and uplifted.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. It needs to be divided into clearer sentences with correct word choice and order to convey the intended meaning.