Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，且有重复和不连贯的地方。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和主谓一致，避免重复表达，并使用连接词使回答更流畅。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. For example, when I was in high school, I had to study hard to get into a good university, so singing helped me calm down and feel better.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，部分词汇使用不当。建议使用正确的时态和词汇，表达要清晰连贯，避免口语化错误。

例: Yes, I learned how to sing after the Chinese entrance exam. During the three-month holiday, I took singing classes to improve my skills, and I still use the techniques I learned today.

提案: 回答表达有些混乱，部分词汇使用错误，句子不够连贯。建议理清思路，使用正确词汇表达感情，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I would like to sing for my parents because they have helped me a lot. Singing for them is a way to show my gratitude for their support and efforts.

提案: 回答中有多处发音和语法错误，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，使用正确的词汇和语法，明确表达观点，并用连接词增强逻辑性。

例: Of course, singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express emotions and feel joy. Also, singing helps release stress, as I experienced during my high school years.

× Yeah, of course, how relaxing because I think he can just help me release some pressure.

✓ Yeah, of course, it's relaxing because I think it can just help me release some pressure.

这里应该使用it作为主语，he是错误的代词使用（12）。另外，how relaxing结构不合适，改为it's relaxing更自然。

× so I was in great pressure and saying I just help me relax and help me come down.

✓ so I was under great pressure and singing just helped me relax and calm down.

pressure是不可数名词，前面应使用under来表达承受压力。原句中'saying'应为'singing'，且动词时态和形式需要调整（5）。

× So I think yeah, it was just quite helpful an eye seeing now you know.

✓ So I think yeah, it was just quite helpful and singing, you know.

原句'an eye seeing'是错误表达，应为'and singing'，这里涉及动词的-ing形式使用错误（8）。

× You, of course, I just learn it after golf cart, which was Chinese entrance test.

✓ Yes, of course, I just learned it after the gaokao, which is the Chinese entrance test.

learn的过去式是learned，时态应与上下文一致（5）。另外，'golf cart'应为'gaokao'，是拼写错误。

× after that I had a. I had a holiday which last for about 3 months so I I just found the claws to spend some time and I think it was quite helpful.

✓ After that, I had a holiday which lasted for about 3 months, so I just found the class to spend some time and I think it was quite helpful.

'last'应为过去式'lasted'，时态错误（5）。'claws'应为'class'，拼写错误。

× Well, I'd like to sing for my parents, maybe because they have helped me a lot, even in a scene, because they're quite good.

✓ Well, I'd like to sing for my parents, maybe because they have helped me a lot, even in a sense, because they're quite good.

'scene'应为'sense'，拼写错误，属于词汇使用错误。

× I think that like she's. I'm sort of grateful to them.

✓ I think that I like them. I'm sort of grateful to them.

'she's'用法错误，应为'I like them'，代词使用错误（12）。

× If course, seeing yourself can really bring happiness to people because well, well, we are seeing you can just feel the emotion in the songs like some happiness, of course.

✓ Of course, singing yourself can really bring happiness to people because, well, when we are singing, you can just feel the emotion in the songs like some happiness, of course.

'seeing'应为'singing'，拼写错误。'we are seeing you'应为'when we are singing'，代词和连词使用错误（12，16）。

× And also saying can just release your pressure.

✓ And also singing can just release your pressure.

'saying'应为'singing'，拼写错误。

× Like just like I said, I was in pressure an nice send some songs in my high school.

✓ Just like I said, I was under pressure and sang some songs in my high school.

'in pressure'应为'under pressure'，介词使用错误（11）。'send'应为'sang'，过去式错误（5）。

× So I think yeah, it's quite help.

✓ So I think yeah, it's quite helpful.

'help'是动词，句中应使用形容词'helpful'来修饰it，形容词使用错误（13）。