Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then provide specific reasons. Avoid redundancy and incorrect grammar.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because I have a good voice and it is one of my passions. Singing makes me feel happy and relaxed, so I like to do it whenever I have free time.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and clarify your points. Also, avoid vague phrases and focus on specific details about your learning experience.

例: Yes, I have taught myself how to sing by practicing regularly. I enjoy singing because it improves my mood and motivates me to achieve my goals.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repeating similar points.

例: If I had the chance, I would prefer to sing for my family because they mean everything to me. Unlike friends or colleagues, my family provides unconditional support and love.

提案: Your answer is good with relevant examples and linking words. To improve, try to correct minor grammar mistakes and use more precise vocabulary.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people express their emotions and relieve stress. For instance, listening to my favorite songs makes me feel relaxed and cheerful. Moreover, singing with others fosters a sense of community and joy.

× Is I do like this singing because I have a good voice, you know, to sing and also it's my wishes.

✓ I do like singing because I have a good voice, you know, to sing and also it's my wish.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'Is I' instead of 'I'. Also, 'wishes' should be singular 'wish' to match the context. The pronoun 'I' should be the subject without 'Is' before it. 'Wish' is singular because it refers to a single desire.

× So I really like it to sing.

✓ So I really like to sing.

The phrase 'like it to sing' is incorrect. The correct form is 'like to sing' without 'it'. The verb 'like' is followed directly by the infinitive form 'to sing'.

× Yes, by myself I have tried a lot of time to sing.

✓ Yes, by myself I have tried many times to sing.

The phrase 'a lot of time' is incorrect here; it should be 'many times' to indicate frequency. Also, 'have tried' is correct present perfect tense to indicate experience up to now.

× Because I like him, as I said before, I really like singing because it makes me feel better an give me some motivations, you know, and issuing goals is perfect when you see now it helps you.

✓ Because I like it, as I said before, I really like singing because it makes me feel better and gives me some motivation, you know, and setting goals is perfect when you see it helps you now.

The pronoun 'him' is incorrect when referring to singing; 'it' should be used. 'An' should be 'and'. 'Give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Motivations' should be singular 'motivation' as an uncountable noun here. 'Issuing goals' is incorrect; 'setting goals' is the correct phrase. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× If I have a chance I want, I would rather to sing for my family.

✓ If I have a chance, I want to sing, but I would rather sing for my family.

The modal verb phrase 'would rather to sing' is incorrect; 'would rather' is followed by the base verb without 'to'. Also, the sentence is restructured for clarity and correct modal verb usage.

× Because my family is everything for me.

✓ Because my family is everything to me.

The phrase 'everything for me' is less common; 'everything to me' is the correct idiomatic expression.

× I don't have any people like my family.

✓ I don't have anyone like my family.

'Any people' is incorrect here; 'anyone' is the correct pronoun to refer to a person in this context.

× You know, my friends, my colleagues, they cannot be my family.

✓ You know, my friends and my colleagues cannot be my family.

The pronoun 'they' is unnecessary and creates redundancy. The sentence is clearer without it.

× Yes, I do believe singing can create a hapiness to people because it allows them to express their emotional release stress, you know?

✓ Yes, I do believe singing can create happiness for people because it allows them to express their emotions and release stress, you know?

The article 'a' before 'hapiness' is incorrect because 'happiness' is an uncountable noun. 'Hapiness' is misspelled; correct spelling is 'happiness'. 'Create happiness for people' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Emotional release stress' is incorrect; it should be 'express their emotions and release stress'.

× For example, when I see my favorite songs, I often feel more relaxed and cheerful.

✓ For example, when I listen to my favorite songs, I often feel more relaxed and cheerful.

The verb 'see' is incorrect when referring to songs; the correct verb is 'listen to'.