Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте повторений и грамматических ошибок, используйте связующие слова для логичности. Например, начните с утверждения, затем добавьте детали о прошлом опыте и влиянии мамы.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it has been a part of my life since childhood. When I was young, I attended singing classes and often performed on stage. Moreover, my mother used to sing and play the guitar for me, which inspired my interest in music.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова, чтобы объяснить причины прекращения занятий. Старайтесь избегать повторений и неполных предложений.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. I attended singing classes for about two months, but I had to stop because the classes were far from my home and I didn't have enough time to continue.

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и грамматику. Используйте связующие слова и уточните, почему это важно для вас.

例: I enjoy singing for my daughter because she is the only one who truly appreciates my singing. I often sing lullabies like "You Are My Sunshine" to her, and she always asks me to sing more, which I consider the best compliment.

提案: Ответ должен быть более чётким и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и конкретизируйте, как пение приносит радость.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people forget their problems and enjoy quality time with family. Moreover, when others appreciate your singing, it makes the experience even more joyful.

× I liked how she saying I like how she played the guitar so I think it provoke my interest.

✓ I liked how she was singing. I like how she played the guitar, so I think it provoked my interest.

The phrase 'how she saying' is incorrect because 'saying' is a present participle that needs an auxiliary verb to form the present continuous tense. The correct form is 'how she was singing'. Also, 'provoke' should be in past tense 'provoked' to match the past context.

× I think it provoke my interest.

✓ I think it provoked my interest.

The verb 'provoke' should be in the past tense 'provoked' to agree with the past context indicated by 'I liked' and 'she played'.

× Yes, I learned.

✓ Yes, I have learned.

Since the question is about experience up to now, the present perfect tense 'have learned' is more appropriate than simple past 'learned'.

× I used to go to singing classes but it lasted not long as it supposed to be.

✓ I used to go to singing classes but it did not last as long as it was supposed to.

The phrase 'it lasted not long' is incorrect; the negative form should be 'did not last'. Also, 'as it supposed to be' needs auxiliary verb 'was' to form past tense 'was supposed to'.

× I had.

✓ I had to stop.

The sentence 'I had.' is incomplete and unclear. It likely intends to say 'I had to stop' or similar to complete the thought.

× I really didn't have time or going to the singing classes because it this place was located very far from.

✓ I really didn't have time to go to the singing classes because the place was located very far away.

The phrase 'or going to' is incorrect; it should be 'to go to'. Also, 'it this place' is incorrect; 'the place' is sufficient. 'Located very far from' is incomplete; 'far away' is the correct expression.

× I like singing her some lullaby songs like She My Sunshine and she always asks me to sing and I think this is the best compliment for me.

✓ I like singing her some lullaby songs like 'You Are My Sunshine' and she always asks me to sing. I think this is the best compliment for me.

The phrase 'singing her some lullaby songs like She My Sunshine' is incorrect. The song title should be 'You Are My Sunshine' and should be in quotes. Also, the sentence is long and should be split for clarity.

× Yeah, I believe because when you seeing you can forget about some problems, you can enjoy the time spent with your family.

✓ Yeah, I believe because when you see, you can forget about some problems and enjoy the time spent with your family.

The phrase 'when you seeing' is incorrect; the verb should be in base form 'see' after 'when'. Also, 'you can enjoy' is better connected with 'and' rather than a comma.