Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and minor redundancy. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, linking words can improve coherence.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a hectic day. For example, I often sing while cooking, which boosts my mood and makes the activity more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about what you learned.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child at school. My music teacher taught me techniques to improve my voice and how to sing fluently. Additionally, I learned to play various musical instruments, which helped me understand music better.

提案: Your answer conveys the main idea but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: I want to sing for my husband because singing allows me to express my feelings and emotions in a special way. Through singing, I can convey my love and appreciation to him clearly.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'positive ITI'. Try to use precise vocabulary and link your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions to others. Moreover, it helps boost energy after a busy day and provides a sense of relaxation and refreshment.

× Sometimes I enjoy singing while doing my cooking becauses it boost my mood.

✓ Sometimes I enjoy singing while doing my cooking because it boosts my mood.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; the correct conjunction is 'because'. Also, 'boost' should be 'boosts' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Yes, I loved.

✓ Yes, I loved to sing.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks the object of 'loved'. Adding 'to sing' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× To sing when I was a child in my school the I learned from my music teacher in my school he gave gave me all he taught me about the fluency and how to improve my voice and how to play the music on various.

✓ I learned to sing when I was a child at my school. My music teacher taught me about fluency, how to improve my voice, and how to play various musical instruments.

The original sentence is run-on and confusing. Breaking it into clear sentences and correcting word order improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× he gave gave me all he taught me about the fluency and how to improve my voice and how to play the music on various.

✓ He gave me all he taught me about fluency, how to improve my voice, and how to play various musical instruments.

The repeated word 'gave' is a typo. Also, 'the music on various' is unclear; it should specify 'various musical instruments'. The pronouns are corrected for clarity.

× I want to sing for my husband because singing a love me to express my feelings an emotions for him in a special way.

✓ I want to sing for my husband because singing allows me to express my feelings and emotions for him in a special way.

The phrase 'singing a love me' is incorrect. It should be 'singing allows me' to correctly express the intended meaning. Also, 'an emotions' should be 'and emotions'.

× Through the singing, I can convey my message is an love, an appreciation to him.

✓ Through singing, I can convey my message of love and appreciation to him.

The phrase 'my message is an love, an appreciation' is incorrect. It should be 'my message of love and appreciation' for proper noun phrase construction.

× Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to the people because it is a great way to express your emotions and feeling to the other person.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it is a great way to express your emotions and feelings to others.

The phrase 'to the people' is too specific; 'to people' is more general and appropriate here. Also, 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match 'emotions'.

× It also helped to boost your energy from a hectic schedule and also give a positive ITI and refreshment.

✓ It also helps to boost your energy during a hectic schedule and gives positive energy and refreshment.

The verb tense should be present tense 'helps' and 'gives' to match the general statement. 'ITI' seems to be a typo and is replaced with 'energy'. Also, 'from a hectic schedule' is better expressed as 'during a hectic schedule'.