Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and natural, but it could be more concise and avoid repetition. Try to directly answer the question with a topic sentence and then add a supporting detail using linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing when I am alone because it helps me relax, but I feel shy singing in front of others.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to form a complete sentence that directly answers the question, and provide specific details with linking words to improve clarity and coherence.

例: I have never had formal singing lessons, but I can follow melodies and keep the tune fairly well.

提案: Your answer is relevant and natural, but you can improve by adding a reason using linking words to make your response more complete and coherent.

例: I would like to sing for my husband because he is supportive and appreciates my singing, even if I'm not very good.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and provide specific examples or reasons to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions. For example, many listen to lively music when they feel sad to improve their mood.

× Well, if I'm singing alone then I would love to, but I don't like to sing in front of other people.

✓ Well, if I'm singing alone then I will love to, but I don't like to sing in front of other people.

The modal verb 'would' is used for hypothetical or conditional situations, but here the speaker is expressing a real preference in the present or future, so 'will' is more appropriate to indicate willingness or intention.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is a British English past tense and past participle form of 'learn', while 'learned' is the American English form. Since the context is general, 'learned' is preferred in American English.

× Well, if it is about the proper education in singing where I don't have one.

✓ Well, if it is about proper education in singing, I don't have any.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. Adding a comma and rephrasing to 'I don't have any' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× But I just know how to follow the tune or but I can keep it with soon.

✓ But I just know how to follow the tune, and I can keep it in tune soon.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Replacing 'or but' with 'and' and correcting 'keep it with soon' to 'keep it in tune soon' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× He is the only person that could handle my voice, my singing abilities.

✓ He is the only person who can handle my voice and my singing abilities.

Use 'who' for people instead of 'that'. Also, 'could' implies past ability or conditional, but present ability is intended, so 'can' is better.

× Yeah, I think so, because they can express their emotions. True singing.

✓ Yeah, I think so, because singing allows people to express their emotions. That's true singing.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Combining them and clarifying the subject improves coherence and grammatical correctness.

× A lot of people are when they're sad, this thing and I be seeing and very lively music.

✓ A lot of people listen to music when they're sad, and I have seen that lively music can help them feel better.

The original sentence is incoherent and grammatically incorrect. Rewriting it to express the intended meaning clearly and correctly improves understanding.