Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and direct response with specific examples. Avoid redundancy and irrelevant words. Use simple and correct sentences to express your opinion.

例: Yes, I like singing very much, especially songs from my own country. For example, I enjoy folk songs because they reflect our culture and traditions. Singing these songs makes me feel connected to my roots.

提案: Your answer needs better grammar and clearer structure. Start with a direct answer, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

例: Yes, I learnt how to sing when I was a child at school. My singing teacher taught me different techniques, and I enjoyed practicing songs. This helped me improve my voice and confidence.

提案: Your answer shows emotion but needs clearer expression and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrases. Be concise and specific.

例: If I get a chance to sing, I would like to sing for my mother because she loves music and works very hard for me. Singing for her would be a way to show my appreciation and love.

提案: Your answer contains some good ideas but has grammatical mistakes and unclear words. Use simple language and correct terms. Also, complete your thoughts and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness to people. It helps release chemicals like endorphins and dopamine, which improve mood and reduce stress. Moreover, singing with others creates a sense of connection and belonging.

× I really liked you singing songs, especially a songs that dedicate from my own country, such as Bob will people.

✓ I really liked your singing songs, especially songs that are dedicated from my own country, such as Bob Will People.

The phrase 'a songs' is incorrect because 'songs' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Also, 'dedicate' should be in passive form 'are dedicated' to correctly express that the songs come from the country.

× I really liked you singing songs, especially a songs that dedicate from my own country, such as Bob will people.

✓ I really liked your singing songs, especially songs that are dedicated from my own country, such as Bob Will People.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used instead of the possessive pronoun 'your' to indicate possession of the singing.

× I really believe that such as these kind of songs can be managed within the subway and can Melissa everywhere and can also.

✓ I really believe that these kinds of songs can be played within the subway and can be heard everywhere.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Such as these kind of songs' is awkward; 'these kinds of songs' is better. 'Can be managed within the subway' is incorrect; 'can be played within the subway' is appropriate. 'Can Melissa everywhere and can also' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; it is corrected to 'can be heard everywhere' to make sense.

× In my school when I was a child my singing teacher teach me how to sing a song.

✓ In my school when I was a child, my singing teacher taught me how to sing a song.

The verb 'teach' should be in the past tense 'taught' to agree with the past time frame 'when I was a child'.

× So at that time I like to singing a song and I try having a good wise so I sing a song.

✓ So at that time I liked singing a song and I tried to have a good voice so I sang a song.

'Like to singing' is incorrect; it should be 'liked singing' or 'liked to sing'. 'Try having' is incorrect; it should be 'tried to have'. Also, 'wise' is likely a mispronunciation of 'voice'. The verbs are adjusted to past tense to match the time frame.

× Well, if I get a chance to sing a song, I really want you sing for my mother, becaused she is only the one person to whom I love a lot and I want to sing for her because she works hard for me and she really likes to let you listen to it.

✓ Well, if I get a chance to sing a song, I really want to sing for my mother, because she is the only person whom I love a lot and I want to sing for her because she works hard for me and she really likes to listen to it.

'I really want you sing' is incorrect; it should be 'I really want to sing'. 'Becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'Only the one person' is better as 'the only person'. 'Let you listen to it' is incorrect; 'likes to listen to it' is appropriate.

× she is only the one person to whom I love a lot

✓ she is the only person whom I love a lot

The phrase 'only the one person' is awkward; 'the only person' is correct. Also, 'to whom I love a lot' is better as 'whom I love a lot' because 'love' does not require 'to'.

× The act of a singing is linked to the release of a positive neurochemicals like endorphins, dopamine's answer arginine, which are known to improve mood and reduce address.

✓ The act of singing is linked to the release of positive neurochemicals like endorphins, dopamine, and arginine, which are known to improve mood and reduce stress.

'A singing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. 'A positive neurochemicals' is incorrect; 'positive neurochemicals' is correct without 'a'. 'Dopamine's answer arginine' is incorrect; it should be 'dopamine and arginine'. 'Reduce address' is a mishearing or typo; it should be 'reduce stress'.

× Singing also fosters a sense of social connection and belonging. The furher contr.

✓ Singing also fosters a sense of social connection and belonging. Furthermore, it contributes...

'The furher contr.' is incomplete and likely intended to be 'Furthermore, it contributes...'. The sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished for clarity.