Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有多处发音和用词错误，导致表达不清晰。建议你注意发音，尤其是单词'singing'和'stay'，并且避免语句不连贯。回答时应直接回答问题，使用完整且连贯的句子，避免重复和无意义的词汇。

例: Yes, I like singing because it is a great way to express my feelings and emotions. It also helps me relax, especially when I feel stressed or sad. Singing my favorite songs always makes me feel better.

提案: 回答中存在语法和表达不准确的问题，部分句子不完整且含糊。建议你使用完整句子，清晰表达学习唱歌的经历，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I have learned some basic singing techniques to improve my voice, although I haven't taken professional lessons. Instead, I watch videos of famous singers online to observe their styles and learn from their performances, which helps me practice.

提案: 你的回答中有语法错误和词汇使用不当，导致意思不明确。建议你使用正确的词汇和句子结构，直接回答问题，并用具体细节支持你的观点。

例: I want to sing for my pastor friend because she always supports and encourages me. She also likes my voice, so singing for her would be a way to show my appreciation.

提案: 回答中有多处语法错误和表达不清晰，影响理解。建议你使用完整且连贯的句子，明确表达唱歌如何带来快乐，并举具体例子支持观点。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax and reduce stress. For example, many people like to sing when they are tired, as it can uplift their mood and make them feel better.

× Yes, I'm fond of saying.

✓ Yes, I'm fond of singing.

The word 'saying' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'singing' because the question is about liking to sing. 'Saying' refers to speaking words, which does not fit the context.

× Because she is a great way to express my feelings and emotions.

✓ Because it is a great way to express my feelings and emotions.

The pronoun 'she' is incorrectly used to refer to 'singing', which is an activity and should be referred to as 'it'. This is a sentence structure and pronoun reference error.

× And seeing also helps me stay.

✓ And singing also helps me stay calm.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'calm' clarifies the meaning.

× Posit A pandam jet IK specially when I'm feeling stressed and sad.

✓ It is a pastime I enjoy especially when I'm feeling stressed and sad.

The original sentence is unintelligible and contains many errors. The correction provides a clear, grammatically correct sentence that fits the context.

× Out since you my favorite songs to both.

✓ I often listen to my favorite songs too.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. The correction provides a clear and correct sentence.

× Yes, I've learned some basic techniques to improve my voice, but I didn't learn from some professional teachers.

✓ Yes, I've learned some basic techniques to improve my voice, but I didn't learn from any professional teachers.

The word 'some' is incorrectly used with a negative sentence; 'any' is the correct quantifier in negative contexts.

× Adjust, adjust.

✓ Actually,

The phrase 'Adjust, adjust.' is unclear and incorrect. 'Actually,' is a suitable discourse marker to start the sentence.

× Watch many videos of famous singers on the Internet because I enjoy observing their styles and learn from their performances.

✓ I watch many videos of famous singers on the Internet because I enjoy observing their styles and learning from their performances.

The verb 'watch' needs a subject 'I' to form a complete sentence. Also, parallel structure requires 'learning' to match 'observing'.

× This way I can practice admin.

✓ This way I can practice a lot.

The word 'admin' is incorrect here; likely a mishearing or typo. 'A lot' fits the context better to express frequent practice.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

No correction needed; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× I really want to sing for my pastor friend because she always supposed and encourages me and she really likes my voice.

✓ I really want to sing for my pastor friend because she always supports and encourages me and she really likes my voice.

The word 'supposed' is incorrect; the correct word is 'supports'. This is a vocabulary error affecting pronoun reference clarity.

× If I have to pick someone I want to seem for, she would definitely be the first person I think of.

✓ If I have to pick someone I want to sing for, she would definitely be the first person I think of.

The word 'seem' is incorrect; it should be 'sing' to match the context.

× Because I can show my crush my appreciations for.

✓ Because I can show my appreciation to her.

The sentence is incomplete and uses 'appreciations' incorrectly; 'appreciation' is uncountable and should be singular. Also, 'to her' clarifies the object.

× Yes, I do. I think she has a power to affect people positively.

✓ Yes, I do. I think it has the power to affect people positively.

The pronoun 'she' is incorrectly used to refer to 'singing', which should be 'it'. Also, 'a power' should be 'the power' to indicate a specific ability.

× Because it can help people. Relax and reduce drafts for example, people like to sing when they're an tired and actions as it can uplift their mood and.

✓ Because it can help people relax and reduce stress. For example, people like to sing when they're tired as it can uplift their mood.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains multiple errors: 'drafts' should be 'stress', 'an tired' should be 'tired', and 'actions' is incorrect. The correction provides a clear, grammatically correct sentence.