Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural, avoid redundancy, and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and feel happy. For example, I often sing my favorite songs while cleaning the house, which makes the task more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains several grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences natural and concise.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons. I think singing well is a natural talent, and unfortunately, I don't have much of it. However, I would enjoy learning how to sing properly.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and then add specific supporting details using linking words. Make sure your sentences are coherent and natural.

例: I would like to sing for my husband to create a memorable and romantic evening. Singing romantic songs for him would make the night special and show my love and appreciation.

提案: Your answer conveys the main idea but is grammatically incorrect and somewhat confusing. Try to organize your thoughts clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details linked logically. Use simpler, natural vocabulary to express your ideas effectively.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and express their emotions. It is a useful way to reduce stress and can also make others feel joyful when they listen.

× Bad is the weight.

✓ Bad is the weight.

This sentence is unclear and does not form a proper sentence structure. It seems to be a fragment or mistranslation. It should be removed or rewritten for clarity.

× Where I can relax and I can be happy singing my favorite song.

✓ It is where I can relax and be happy singing my favorite song.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a main clause. Adding 'It is' at the beginning completes the sentence structure.

× I play a lot of music while I'm cleaning the.

✓ I play a lot of music while I'm cleaning.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'the' which is incomplete. Removing 'the' corrects the sentence.

× No, I never had to learn how to send.

✓ No, I never had to learn how to sing.

The word 'send' is a typo and should be 'sing' to match the context. Also, 'had to learn' is acceptable here as past tense.

× I have to say that I will really enjoy it by but that's a gift that you born with it an I don't really have it.

✓ I have to say that I would really enjoy it, but that's a gift you are born with and I don't really have it.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'will' should be 'would' for hypothetical, 'by' is unnecessary, 'born' needs auxiliary verb 'are', and 'an' should be 'and'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× Add create diagram memory in a romantic night.

✓ And create a memorable moment on a romantic night.

The original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect words. 'Add' should be 'And', 'diagram memory' is incorrect and replaced with 'a memorable moment', and 'in' changed to 'on' for correct preposition.

× Make him a sit in at a romantic songs and thanks all the night.

✓ Make him sit through romantic songs and thank him all night.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'Make him a sit in' is incorrect; corrected to 'Make him sit through'. 'Thanks all the night' corrected to 'thank him all night' for proper verb form and meaning.

× That would be a perfect plan for us.

✓ That would be a perfect plan for us.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Yes, I think singing can make people happy, is a way where you can relax and be free of stressed, liberated role of emerging emotions and I think is a very useful tool for you to be happy and making another happy.

✓ Yes, I think singing can make people happy. It is a way to relax and be free of stress, a liberating role for expressing emotions, and I think it is a very useful tool for you to be happy and to make others happy.

The original sentence is a run-on with missing subjects and incorrect word forms. Breaking into sentences, correcting 'stressed' to 'stress', 'liberated role of emerging emotions' to 'a liberating role for expressing emotions', and 'making another happy' to 'make others happy' improves clarity and grammar.