Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and complete answer with correct sentence structure. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain your feelings about singing more naturally.

例: Yes, I like singing, but only when I am alone because I don't consider myself a good singer. I feel shy to sing in front of others since my voice is not very strong.

提案: Focus on answering directly and clearly. Use proper sentence structure and avoid unnecessary details that confuse the meaning. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I have not formally learnt singing, but during school morning prayers, each class had to participate. When it was my class's turn, I took part and learned a little about singing then.

提案: Try to avoid short fragmented sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and express your feelings clearly.

例: As I mentioned, I am not a great singer, but if I had to sing for someone, it would be my husband. Singing for him would make me feel comfortable, and it is a wonderful way to express love.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid abrupt endings. Use linking words to explain your ideas clearly and provide specific reasons or examples.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. When I feel sad or lonely, I listen to music, which helps me relax and forget about my problems for a while.

× I like singing, but if I am alone because I'm not a good. Singer or I don't have that voice that can be heard by others so I can say I'm a bot from single. Not more than that.

✓ I like singing, but only when I am alone because I'm not a good singer and I don't have a voice that can be heard by others, so I can say I'm a bit of a bad singer. Nothing more than that.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'good. Singer' with a period and capital letter, and 'bot from single' which seems to be a mispronunciation or typo for 'bit of a bad singer'. Also, the sentence structure is fragmented. The correction fixes adjective use and sentence flow to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Not really about the singing but when I was in school so they used to have morning prayer so in that every class has to participate.

✓ Not really about singing, but when I was in school, they used to have morning prayers and every class had to participate.

The original sentence mixes tenses and has awkward phrasing. 'Has to participate' should be in past tense 'had to participate' to match 'used to have'. Also, 'morning prayer' should be plural 'morning prayers' as it is a recurring event.

× On some days, so it was my school turn at it was my plaster and so at that time I took the participation and where I learn a little bit.

✓ On some days, it was my school's turn and it was my class, so at that time I took part and learned a little bit.

The sentence has several errors: 'plaster' is likely a mishearing of 'class', 'took the participation' should be 'took part', and 'where I learn' should be past tense 'where I learned'. The correction aligns verb tenses and corrects vocabulary.

× If I would really like to sing for my loved ones, let's say my husband.

✓ I would really like to sing for my loved ones, let's say my husband.

The phrase 'If I would really like' is incorrect; 'would' should not be used after 'if' in this context. The correct form is 'I would really like' to express desire.

× With him I'll be a little bit comfort able and also it's a great way to express your love.

✓ With him, I'll be a little bit comfortable and also it's a great way to express your love.

The word 'comfort able' is incorrectly split; it should be 'comfortable' as one word, an adjective describing the speaker's feeling.

× When I am sad or if I'm feeling a little bit alone, I always turn on the music and with that I can find a little bit please from my daily activities and whatever, whatever I'm failing.

✓ When I am sad or feeling a little bit alone, I always turn on music and with that I can find a little bit of peace from my daily activities and whatever I am failing at.

'Please' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'peace'. Also, 'whatever, whatever I'm failing' is awkward and incomplete; it should be 'whatever I am failing at' to complete the thought. The pronoun usage is corrected for clarity.