Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. For example, use 'confidence' instead of 'confident' and avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly.

例: No, I don't like singing because I am scared and lack the confidence to sing in front of everyone.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and has grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and explain your reason clearly using linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in grade six because my teacher encouraged me. I believe learning music helps develop skills that are useful in the future.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I dream of singing for my mother in front of everyone because she is my inspiration.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is fragmented and has grammatical mistakes. Use linking words and complete sentences to express your thoughts clearly and naturally.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people in many ways. For example, when they are stressed or tense, listening to music helps them feel relaxed, making it a great activity to enjoy during free time.

× I don't have that much confident to sing in front of everybody.

✓ I don't have that much confidence to sing in front of everybody.

The word 'confident' is an adjective, but here a noun is needed. The correct noun form is 'confidence'. So, 'that much confidence' is the correct phrase.

× Yes I did learn how to sing when I was in grade 6th becaused my teacher forced me to.

✓ Yes, I did learn how to sing when I was in grade 6 because my teacher forced me to.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; the correct past tense conjunction is 'because'. Also, 'grade 6th' should be 'grade 6' as '6th' is redundant with 'grade'.

× Learn music. Because everything. Helps you in the future.

✓ I learned music because everything helps you in the future.

The original sentences are fragments and incomplete. They should be combined into a complete sentence with subject and verb for clarity and correctness.

× The cause? She's my inspiration.

✓ The reason is that she's my inspiration.

'The cause?' is an incomplete phrase and unclear. Using 'The reason is that' clarifies the sentence and connects it properly to the explanation.

× Yes, in my opinion singing and bring happiness to people in many ways like whenever they are stressed.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, singing can bring happiness to people in many ways, like whenever they are stressed.

The conjunction 'and' is incorrectly used; it should be 'can' to indicate ability. Also, commas are needed for clarity.

× Or they had tension.

✓ Or they have tension.

The sentence refers to a general condition, so present tense 'have' is appropriate instead of past tense 'had'.

× They listen to music and they feel very relaxed and it is the best thing.

✓ They listen to music, feel very relaxed, and it is the best thing to do when you are free or tense.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper conjunctions and punctuation. Combining the ideas with commas and conjunctions improves clarity.