Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但句子结构较长且有些重复。建议简化句子，避免冗余，同时使用更多连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. I often sing with my son, which also strengthens our bond.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用简单明了的句子，直接回答问题，并避免语法错误。

例: No, I have never learned how to sing professionally because I don't have enough time or money to take singing lessons.

提案: 回答中有很多语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议使用简单句子，明确表达想为谁唱歌及原因。

例: I would like to sing for my son because he is very sweet and singing for him helps me feel better when I am stressed.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误和表达不流畅的问题。建议使用正确的词汇和连接词，表达更自然。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people forget their sadness. When I feel upset, singing is a great way to improve my mood.

× Well, yes, I like singing and in my spare time I will usually sing along with my son.

✓ Well, yes, I like singing and in my spare time I usually sing along with my son.

句中“will usually sing”时态使用不当，表示习惯动作时应使用一般现在时，故改为“usually sing”。

× I think that is very relaxing and can relieve my stress and it can strengthen the relationship between my son and me.

✓ I think that it is very relaxing, can relieve my stress, and can strengthen the relationship between my son and me.

句子中缺少主语“it”，导致结构不完整，需补充“it”使句子完整。

× Well, to be honest, I've never learned how to sing because even though I like saying but I don't want to make it too.

✓ Well, to be honest, I've never learned how to sing because even though I like singing, I don't want to make it too serious.

原句中“like saying”应为“like singing”，且句子不完整，需补充“too serious”使表达完整。

× Like in professional, therefore, items spare any time or money in learning how to sing.

✓ As a professional, therefore, I don't spare any time or money in learning how to sing.

原句结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，需调整为完整句子。

× Well, I would love to sing for my son 'cause he's such a sweet guy that deviate my boredom under my stress sometimes Therefore I would like to sing for my son to try him up and two.

✓ Well, I would love to sing for my son because he's such a sweet guy who relieves my boredom and stress sometimes. Therefore, I would like to sing for my son to cheer him up too.

原句中“deviate my boredom under my stress”表达错误，应为“relieves my boredom and stress”；“try him up and two”应为“cheer him up too”。

× Become a forgettable on memory for him.

✓ Become an unforgettable memory for him.

“forgettable”是形容词，意思是“容易被忘记的”，应使用“unforgettable”表示“难忘的”；“on memory”应为“memory”。

× Well, I think of course seeing is a very ideal way to help us to forget about our sadness.

✓ Well, I think of course singing is a very ideal way to help us forget about our sadness.

原句中“seeing”应为“singing”，是拼写错误。

× So therefore I think if you feel down or upset, then sing can be the best remedy for us to forget about all this on happy occasions.

✓ So therefore I think if you feel down or upset, then singing can be the best remedy for us to forget about all this on happy occasions.

“sing”应改为动名词“singing”，作为主语使用。