Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“seldom eating”应为“seldom eat”，句子结构不完整且有重复。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并注意语法正确性。

例: I seldom eat chocolate because I am not a big fan of it. I find it too sweet, and I usually prefer less sweet foods. Also, sometimes it melts in my pocket, which makes me uncomfortable.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“Am I not?”和“I'm not very interesting it”。建议使用简洁明了的句子，避免语法错误，并且表达完整的意思。

例: I don't eat chocolate very often, maybe two or three times a month. I find most chocolates in China too sweet, so I'm not very interested in them.

提案: 回答中语法和句子结构不完整，如“Is still not very often”应为“It was still not very often”。建议使用完整句子，注意时态和主谓一致。

例: I didn't eat chocolate very often as a kid, but it was more regular than now. I loved sweet things when I was a child, and chocolate was one of them, so I used to eat some.

提案: 回答中断断续续且语法错误较多，表达不连贯。建议使用连贯的句子，合理使用连接词，并清晰表达观点。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes really good, even though I'm not a big fan. Additionally, it can give you energy to start your day at work or study.

提案: 回答中断断续续且表达不完整，句子不连贯。建议用完整句子表达观点，并避免重复和语法错误。

例: I don't have a particular favorite flavor, but I guess almond chocolate is my favorite because it has a special taste. If I have a chance, I would choose to buy that.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不流畅的问题。建议使用连贯的句子，避免口语化的填充词，并清晰表达观点。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is very popular. If you want to give a gift, chocolate is a safe choice that most people will like.

× I seldom eating chocolate because I'm not a big fan of it.

✓ I seldom eat chocolate because I'm not a big fan of it.

这里的动词应该用原形，因为'seldom'后面接动词原形，不能用动名词形式。

× I'm not a person that like me much sweet things.

✓ I'm not a person who likes sweet things very much.

关系代词后面的动词要与先行词一致，且'me'用错了，应该用主格'who'，并且动词要加-s以符合第三人称单数。

× And it often mouse in my pocket bring me a lot of. Uncomfort.

✓ And it often causes mice in my pocket to bring me a lot of discomfort.

这里'mouse'应为复数形式'mice'，且句子结构不完整，需要调整使其通顺。

× Am I not? I don't eat chocolate very often and just about two or three times a month I guess.

✓ No, I don't. I don't eat chocolate very often, just about two or three times a month, I guess.

'Am I not?'用法不当，应该用否定回答'No, I don't.'来回应问题。

× Because it's very sweet. Food in China sweet most of chocolate St. in China so I'm not very interesting it.

✓ Because it's very sweet. Most chocolate in China is sweet, so I'm not very interested in it.

'interesting'用错了，应该用形容词'interested'来表达感兴趣的状态。

× Is still not very often, but is. A more regular than now.

✓ It still wasn't very often, but it was more regular than now.

这里描述过去的习惯，应该用过去时态。

× Because I loved eating Swiss things when I was child and chocolate is 1 of it.

✓ Because I loved eating Swiss things when I was a child and chocolate is one of them.

'child'前需要冠词'a'，'one of it'应为'one of them'，指代复数。

× Oh wow, because it has a really good taste, even I'm not a big fan of it.

✓ Oh wow, because it has a really good taste, even though I'm not a big fan of it.

缺少连词'even though'来连接两个句子，使句意完整。

× The chocolate have some. Additional function for instance is.

✓ Chocolate has some additional functions; for instance, it can...

'Chocolate'作为不可数名词，动词用单数形式'have'应改为'has'。

× Have a chance to make you a make you more. Have more energy to start a day work or study.

✓ It can give you more energy to start a day's work or study.

句子结构混乱，需调整为完整句子，且'day work'应为'a day's work'。

× I'm not. I don't have a particular. Favorite flavor but I guess it might be the almond chocolate.

✓ I don't have a particular favorite flavor, but I guess it might be almond chocolate.

句子断裂，需合并为完整句子。

× The other chocolate for Maine? If I have a chance to buy.

✓ The other chocolate for me, if I have a chance to buy it.

句子不完整，需补充主语和谓语使其完整。

× Yes, it's a really good way to cause chocolate is.

✓ Yes, it's a really good way because chocolate is

'cause'应为'because'，且句子未完成。

× So if you want to give gifts is not uh, is uh. Choice that you will not get wrong.

✓ So if you want to give gifts, it's a choice that you will not go wrong with.

句子结构不完整，缺少主语和谓语，需调整使其通顺。