Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and complete your final sentence. Use the correct structure “it depends on what I need to memorise” instead of “the thing that's memorizing.” Also, use plural forms correctly, such as “people's birthdays,” and connect your contrasting ideas clearly with “however.”

例: It depends on what I need to memorise. I’m not very good at remembering numbers or passwords, but I can easily remember important events and people’s birthdays. I think I remember personal experiences better because they are connected to strong emotions.

提案: The answer is relevant and includes a specific example, but it contains several grammar and word-choice problems. Use the past tense consistently: “I had” and “I mixed up.” Say “an important meeting related to my career,” “the date and time,” and “I thought I was free.” Divide the long sentence into shorter sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, I have. Two weeks ago, I had an important meeting related to my career, but I mixed up the date and time. I thought I was free that day, so I completely missed the appointment. Since then, I’ve started checking my calendar more carefully.

提案: Give a clearer topic sentence before listing your methods. Use natural collocations such as “write events in my notes,” “set reminders on my phone,” and “daily tasks.” Avoid repetition between “lists” and “notes,” and correct “this can practice can support my forgetfulness” to “these habits help me manage my forgetfulness.”

例: I need to remember appointments, deadlines, and small daily tasks. To do this, I write important events in my phone’s calendar and set reminders for them. I also make a short to-do list each morning, which helps me manage my forgetfulness.

提案: The main idea is understandable, but several expressions are unnatural. Say “I’m forgetful when it comes to small things and minor events,” “I become focused and organised,” and “when I have an important meeting.” Keep the answer concise and explain briefly why important events are easier for you to remember.

例: I’m quite forgetful when it comes to small things and minor events. However, when I have something important, I become very focused and organised. For example, before an important meeting, I check the details several times and put a reminder on my phone, so I’m unlikely to forget it.

× I guess that depends on the thing that's memorizing.

✓ I guess that depends on the thing that is being memorized.

The thing receives the action of memorizing; it does not perform the action. Therefore, the passive form is needed: is being memorized. You can also say, I guess that depends on what I am trying to memorize.

× I can remember specific events in time and even people's birthday.

✓ I can remember specific events in time and even people's birthdays.

The speaker is referring to the birthdays of multiple people, so birthday must be plural: birthdays. Remember to use a plural noun when the meaning refers to more than one item.

× It happened to me two weeks ago when I have a very important meeting for my career life.

✓ It happened to me two weeks ago when I had a very important meeting for my career.

The time expression two weeks ago refers to a completed event in the past, so have must change to the past-tense form had. Use the simple past for completed past events.

× I thought that I would have a free time.

✓ I thought that I would have free time.

Free time is an uncountable noun in this meaning, so it does not take the indefinite article a. Use free time rather than a free time.

× Simple actions such as writing events on my notes or even scheduling a timer in my phone can assist me to remember daily life tasks.

✓ Simple actions such as writing events in my notes or even setting a timer on my phone can help me remember daily tasks.

We normally write something in notes and use something on a phone. Therefore, in my notes and on my phone are the appropriate prepositional phrases. Also, help me remember is a natural verb pattern.

× I guess this can practice can support my forgetfulness.

✓ I guess this practice can help me manage my forgetfulness.

The original sentence contains an incorrect and repeated verb structure: can practice can support. Practice is needed as a noun subject, followed by the modal verb can and the base verb help. Avoid placing two unnecessary can structures together.

× I'm a very forgetful person to small items and events.

✓ I'm a very forgetful person when it comes to small items and events.

The preposition to is not used after forgetful in this expression. The natural structure is forgetful when it comes to something. You can also say, I often forget small items and events.

× So when they have an important meeting, I will be so concentrated about it that I won't forget.

✓ So when I have an important meeting, I will be so concentrated about it that I won't forget.

The speaker is talking about themself, so the subject pronoun must be I, not they. Make sure the pronoun agrees with the intended person in the context.

× I will be so concentrated about it that I won't forget.

✓ I will be so focused on it that I won't forget.

The correct preposition after focused is on, not about. Focused on is also more natural than concentrated about when describing attention directed toward an important event.