Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答案内容与题目相关，但表达有语法错误、重复与不连贯，应更直接、简洁并使用连接词。建议：1) 开头直接给出主题句（Yes/No并简要原因）；2) 修正时态与动词搭配（e.g. memorise, recite, remember）；3) 避免重复词汇与犹豫音，句子控制在3-4句；4) 加入一两个具体细节（如记不住诗句、情景），使回答更具体。

例: Not really. I find it hard to memorise things, especially poems from primary school. For example, my teacher asked us to recite a poem and I often forgot the lines during the test, which made me feel embarrassed. Because of that, I now try to practise small sections every day.

提案: 回答包含合适的例子但语言不够准确且存在重复与时态错误。建议：1) 用一个清晰的主题句承认或否认并给出具体例子；2) 使用正确时态（past tense）描述过去发生的事，避免混用现在时；3) 用连接词（for example, however）使句子连贯；4) 最后一到句说明后续改变或结果，展示进步。

例: Yes, I have. For example, in primary school I often forgot to bring my homework and my mother was very annoyed. However, when I reached junior high I changed my habits and started preparing my bag the night before, so this rarely happens now.

提案: 回答涵盖了主要内容但句子结构混乱、词序错误和冗余信息。建议：1) 以主题句直接回答（e.g. As a university student, I need to remember...）；2) 使用正确词序和名词短语（e.g. when classes begin, exam dates）；3) 用连接词列举（for example, also）；4) 提供一两个具体细节（如 assignment deadlines, friends' birthdays）。

例: As a university student, I need to remember many things, such as when my classes begin and the dates of exams. For example, I also keep track of assignment deadlines and my friends' birthdays so I can help them or make plans.

提案: 回答清晰展示了方法，但有重复、语法和词汇使用不当（e.g. alarm clocks on my mobile phones, ring ringing）。建议：1) 使用条理分明的句子（Firstly..., Secondly...）；2) 修正词汇与表达（set reminders/alarms, write notes, use a calendar app）；3) 用连接词增强流畅性；4) 给出具体例子（例如使用App名称或设定时间）。

例: I usually write notes and use my phone to set reminders. For example, I keep a digital calendar for exam dates, set multiple alarms for important appointments, and make a short to-do list each evening so I don't forget tasks.

× I clearly remember when I was in primary school, teacher told us to memory the poems, but I often forget it when people know. When teacher check this I I was really upset.

✓ I clearly remember when I was in primary school, the teacher told us to memorise the poems, but I often forgot them when people asked. When the teacher checked this, I was really upset.

本句主要问题是时态使用不当和动词形式错误。原句混用了现在时和过去时（remember... was... told... but I often forget），应统一使用过去时描述过去发生的事情；此外“memory”是名词，应使用动词“memorise”；代词要与“poems”复数一致（them）；“when people know”意图为“when people asked/when asked”，用词不当；“check”应为过去式“checked”。建议：描述过去经历时，把主要动词改为过去式，使用正确的动词（memorise），代词与先行词保持数的一致。

× Uh, of course, when I was in primary school, I often forget to take my homework to school and my mother was really annoyed about that. But after that, when I was in junior high, I, I won't make.

✓ Uh, of course, when I was in primary school, I often forgot to take my homework to school and my mother was really annoyed about that. But after that, when I was in junior high, I didn't make that mistake.

本句时态混用与省略不当。描述过去习惯应使用过去时（often forgot），不能用现在时“forget”。后半句想表达“我后来不再犯这个错误”，应用过去时或过去完成时的表述（didn't make that mistake），而不是未来式“won't make”。建议：统一使用过去时描述过去的变化，并补全省略的宾语以清晰表达意思。

× Because now I'm the student of university so I need to remember a lot of things in daily life such as when is the class begin and when is the exams and also I need to remember my about my friends things.

✓ Because now I'm a university student, I need to remember a lot of things in daily life such as when classes begin and when the exams are, and also I need to remember things about my friends.

本句存在冠词和名词搭配错误。应使用不定冠词“a university student”而不是“the student of university”。短语“when is the class begin”语序和动词形式错误，正确为“when classes begin”；“when is the exams”同样语序和单复数、冠词问题，应为“when the exams are”；最后部分语序不当且多余词“my about”错误，应为“things about my friends”。建议：使用正确的冠词（a/the），注意主谓语序（疑问句与陈述句区别），名词单复数一致并简化表达。

× Firstly I will make notes about my plans and and check the time and make a lot of alarm clocks on my mobile phones and the and the ring ringing will alarm me to do what I need.

✓ Firstly, I make notes about my plans, check the time, and set many alarms on my mobile phone; the ringing will remind me to do what I need.

本句存在动词形式和冗余词。原句用“will make”与上下文混乱，可用一般现在时习惯性动作“make/ set”；短语“make a lot of alarm clocks on my mobile phones”不自然，正确动词为“set alarms on my mobile phone”；“the and the ring ringing”重复且词形错误，应为“the ringing”；“will remind me”比“will alarm me to do”更自然。建议：表达习惯性或经常性行为可用一般现在时，使用固定搭配“set alarms”，删去重复词并用简洁自然的短语。