Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect tense/form. For example, correct grammar (I am good at memorizing things) and give a clear example (I could remember names and dates from school).

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, when I was a child I could remember classmates’ names and birthdays easily, which helped me organise small parties for them.

提案: Answer directly and complete the story with clear sequencing words. Use correct perfect/simple past and finish the consequence. Be specific about what happened and what you did afterwards.

例: Yes, I have. A few years ago I missed an important test because I forgot the schedule. After I realised, I contacted my teacher and explained the situation, then I arranged to take a makeup test.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and explain with specific details and cause-effect language. Fix grammar (remove extra articles) and use linking words like because or so to show logic. Be concise (max 4–5 sentences).

例: I need to remember my experiment schedule every day because running one task late can delay the whole project. Therefore I plan my steps in advance and allow buffer time between procedures.

提案: Structure the answer: start with a topic sentence describing your methods, then give specific examples and sequence words. Correct pluralisation and use concise phrasing. Mention concrete tools (notes, calendar, alarms) and how you rely on them.

例: I usually write important tasks in a notebook or enter them in my phone calendar and set alarms. For instance, I put my project deadlines in the calendar and set reminders one day and one hour before, so I never miss them.

× Yes, I think I am a good at memorizing something.

✓ Yes, I think I am good at memorizing things.

The phrase 'a good' is incorrect because 'good' is an adjective modifying ability and does not need the article 'a'; also 'something' is vague—use plural 'things' to match general ability. Improve by removing the article and using 'things' when speaking generally: 'good at memorizing things.'

× For example, I remember everything in my young.

✓ For example, I remember everything from my childhood.

The phrase 'in my young' is ungrammatical and fails to convey time. Use the noun 'childhood' or the phrase 'when I was young' to indicate past period. Also 'remember' can remain present to express lasting memory. Suggest: 'I remember everything from my childhood.'

× So when I was young I used to be cry when I faced the forts.

✓ When I was young I used to cry when I faced difficulties.

'Used to be cry' mixes 'used to' with passive 'be' incorrectly; the correct pattern is 'used to' + base verb: 'used to cry.' 'Faced the forts' is unclear—likely 'fears' or 'difficulties.' Choose a clear noun like 'difficulties.' Suggest: 'I used to cry when I faced difficulties.'

× Yes, I have ever forgotten something important.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something important.

'Ever' is incorrectly placed with present perfect here; in affirmative sentences 'ever' is usually used in questions or negatives. Remove 'ever' to make a natural affirmative present perfect sentence: 'I have forgotten something important.'

× For example, a few years ago I forgot the test schedule.

✓ For example, a few years ago I forgot the test schedule.

This sentence is grammatically correct but contextually incomplete in the transcript because the following sentence is fragmented. No grammatical change needed; keep as is.

× So after realizing that I just to my.

✓ So after realizing that, I immediately went to my professor/office to sort it out.

The original is incomplete and lacks a main verb and object ('just to my' is fragmentary). Provide a complete clause with a past-tense main verb to match 'a few years ago.' Use a clear objective phrase such as 'went to my professor' or 'went to the office' and an infinitive phrase 'to sort it out.'

× I need to remember the my experimental schedule because if I perform the one schedule other everything may be delayed in my experiment.

✓ I need to remember my experimental schedule because if I follow the wrong schedule, everything in my experiment may be delayed.

The sentence has multiple article and word-choice errors: 'the my' duplicates articles, use 'my' alone; 'perform the one schedule other' is ungrammatical—use 'follow the wrong schedule' or 'follow a different schedule'; word order 'other everything' is incorrect—use 'everything in my experiment.' Also adjust modal/possibility phrasing to 'may be delayed.'

× To remember important thing, I usually write thing on my note or my phone, so and that day I set the alarm to remind that yeah.

✓ To remember important things, I usually write them in my notebook or on my phone, and that day I set an alarm to remind me.

Use plural 'important things' when generalizing; 'write thing' needs plural and a pronoun object 'write them'; preposition should be 'in my notebook' or 'on my phone'; 'set the alarm to remind that' is incorrect—use 'set an alarm to remind me.' Remove filler 'yeah.' Use consistent verb forms and objects.

× So based on that I remember important thing.

✓ So based on that, I remember important things.

Use plural 'things' when speaking generally. Also add a comma after 'based on that' for clarity. Present simple 'remember' is acceptable to express habit. Suggest: 'So based on that, I remember important things.'