Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えは主題に直接触れているが、文法ミスや冗長表現が多く、具体性と流暢さが不足しています。まずは主文（主題文）を明確にし、付加情報は2文以内で具体例を使いましょう。文法では主語と動詞の一致、過去形と現在完了形の使い分け、不要な反復を直すこと。つなぎ言葉（for example, because, so）を適切に使って論理を明確にしてください。例文を音読し、短く自然な文を作る練習をしてください。

例: Yes, I’m quite good at memorising things. For example, in high school I could easily remember dates and events in both Japanese and world history, which helped me get high marks in those subjects.

提案: 回答は体験を述べているが、時制の混乱（過去形・現在完了の混同）、不要な語の重複、最後の表現（"I really appreciate"）が不適切です。過去の一度の出来事なら過去形で統一し、理由と結果を明確に述べましょう。感情や結果（友人の反応など）を一文で付け加えると具体性が増します。語順と冠詞（"the appointment"ではなく"an appointment"など）にも注意してください。

例: Yes, I have. Once I forgot an appointment with a friend because I was very busy doing homework at school, so I missed it. She was upset, and I apologised and arranged another time.

提案: 答えは主題に触れているが、語順や表現（"to import"などの誤用）、発音のためのためらい（uh）が目立ちます。簡潔な主題文の後に具体的な例（買い物、約束、支払いなど）を挙げ、接続詞（for example, so that）でつなげてください。また、動詞フレーズは自然な英語に直すこと（"make a note"や"write down"）。1〜2の短い文でまとめる練習をしましょう。

例: In my daily life I need to remember things like appointments and bills. For example, I always write them down in a notebook so I don’t miss payment dates or meetings.

提案: 回答は方法を述べており内容は適切だが、語順（write them down）、重複（"put put"）、文法（"So I careful"→"So I am careful"）の誤りがあり流暢さに欠けます。短く明確な主題文を使い、具体的な手順やアプリ名、頻度（always / usually）を加えると説得力が上がります。接続語（for example, so）を正しく使う練習をしてください。

例: To remember important things, I usually write them down or add them to my smartphone calendar with reminders. For example, I set an alert an hour before appointments so I don’t forget.

× I good at memorizing things.

✓ I am good at memorizing things.

The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' for the present simple with the subject 'I'. Use 'I am' to form the correct present tense be-verb. Suggestion: Always include the correct form of 'to be' (I am, he/she is, we/they are).

× For example, at high school I I was good at memorizing history of Japanese or world's history and that grade was bitter.

✓ For example, at high school I was good at memorizing Japanese history or world history, and my grades were good.

Several issues: duplicate 'I I' is a repetition (sentence structure error but covered by past tense and subject-verb agreement). 'History of Japanese' should be 'Japanese history' (word order) and 'world's history' should be 'world history'. 'That grade was bitter' is incorrect collocation; likely meant 'my grades were good' or 'I got good grades'. Use plural 'grades' and past tense 'were'. Suggestion: Use correct noun order and idiomatic expressions: 'Japanese history', 'world history', 'my grades were good'.

× Yes, I had.

✓ Yes, I have.

Responding to 'Have you ever forgotten something important?' requires present perfect ('have'). 'I had' is past simple and does not fit the question. Suggestion: Use present perfect ('I have') to indicate life experience up to now.

× I yes I have.

✓ Yes, I have.

Redundant 'I' and inconsistent phrasing. The correct short answer to 'Have you ever...' is 'Yes, I have.' Suggestion: Use concise affirmative response: 'Yes, I have.'

× I forgot my the appointment with my friend because I was very busy and I had to do my homework in school.

✓ I missed an appointment with my friend because I was very busy and had to do my homework at school.

Use 'missed an appointment' or 'forgot the appointment' — combining 'my the' is incorrect (article error). 'Had to do my homework in school' is better as 'at school'. Remove redundant 'I' before 'had to'. Suggestion: Use correct article and preposition: 'an appointment' or 'the appointment', and 'at school'.

× So I forgot that and I really appreciate.

✓ So I forgot that, and I really regret it.

'I really appreciate' is incomplete—'appreciate' needs an object (appreciate what?). Likely intended 'I really regret it' to express remorse. Use correct verb to match meaning. Suggestion: Use 'regret' or 'feel sorry' when expressing remorse: 'I really regret it.'

× I think to remember in my daily life, uh, I should note carefully, for example, to not to miss something, to import some important appointment I have.

✓ I think that in my daily life I should take careful notes, for example, so I don't miss important appointments.

Several issues: 'I think to remember in my daily life' is awkward; use 'I think that in my daily life'. 'I should note carefully' is unnatural—use 'take careful notes'. 'to not to miss' has double 'to' (grammar error). 'import some important appointment I have' contains 'import' instead of 'important' and wrong word order. Suggestion: Use 'so I don't miss important appointments' and avoid doubled 'to'.

× I care to take note.

✓ I take care to take notes.

'I care to take note' is unnatural. Use 'I take care to take notes' or 'I make sure to take notes'. Also plural 'notes' is more natural. Suggestion: Use fixed expressions like 'take care to' or 'make sure to'.

× Not to forget important things, I often write down them or or I put put them in calendar applications in my smartphone.

✓ To avoid forgetting important things, I often write them down or put them in a calendar app on my smartphone.

'Not to forget' is awkward; use 'to avoid forgetting'. 'Write down them' has wrong word order; object should follow verb: 'write them down'. Duplicate words 'or or' and 'put put' are repetitions. 'Calendar applications' is plural and formal—'a calendar app' is more natural. 'In my smartphone' should be 'on my smartphone'. Suggestion: Use 'write them down' and 'put them in a calendar app on my smartphone'.

× So I careful, I'm careful.

✓ So I'm careful.

'So I careful' lacks the verb 'am' and repeats 'I'm careful'. Keep concise: 'So I'm careful.' Suggestion: Use correct form of 'to be' and avoid repetition.