Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 表达要更自然并且结构清晰。回答时先直接给出主题句（我不擅长记忆），然后用一到两句具体例子说明你如何补救（比如贴便条、用手机提醒），避免冗长和重复。注意语法（例如“memory ability”可简化为“good at remembering”），连贯词可用because、so或for example。

例: I'm not very good at remembering things. To cope with this, I write short notes and stick them on the refrigerator or set reminders on my phone so I don't forget what to bring to work.

提案: 回答需要更符合时态和连贯性。先回答是或否，然后用一两个具体细节说明事件（什么时候、发生了什么、结果怎样）。用正确的过去时态并加上连接词，例如“However”或“Unfortunately”。避免不必要的描述，把重点放在影响和你学到的东西上。

例: Yes, I did. Last month I travelled to Japan and promised my mother I would buy a cosmetic item for her. However, once I arrived I got distracted and completely forgot, so I had to call her and apologise.

提案: 回答应更直接并用清晰句子表达主要内容。先说出你日常需要记住的主要事项（工作任务、客户要求、学习计划），然后用具体例子或时间安排支持。注意词汇搭配（client requirements, practice my language）和句子简洁性。

例: I need to remember my work tasks and client requirements every day. For example, I spend most of the morning responding to clients and after work I practise language exercises to improve my skills.

提案: 表述要更自然并突出方法的具体性。先给出总体方法（使用手机提醒和标签），然后说明具体做法（用闹钟、备忘录、照片或清单）。避免不准确或重复的短语，保持一句到两句的支持细节。

例: I usually rely on my smartphone to remember important things. I set alarms, create checklist reminders, or take photos of items and labels so I don't have to use paper notes.

× In my opinion, I'm not quite good at memory ability.

✓ In my opinion, I'm not very good at remembering things.

原句中“memory ability”用法不自然，英语中常用动名词短语“remembering things”来表达“记忆/记东西”的能力；另外“not quite good”在此语境下更自然表达为“not very good”。建议用动名词结构并调整程度副词。

× I need to take lots of notes to remind my text for resemble every day I note on the refrigerator to to tell myself what I should bring before working.

✓ I need to take lots of notes to remind myself. For example, every day I put a note on the refrigerator to tell myself what I should bring to work.

原句句子结构混乱，有重复词（“to to”）、不正确的短语（“remind my text for resemble”）和不连贯的表达。将句子拆分并用常见搭配："remind myself"、"put a note on the refrigerator"、"what I should bring to work"。建议把复杂想法拆成两句，使用固定短语。

× Have you ever forgotten something important? Student: Yes, last month I went to Japan for traveling and before taking the flight I promised my mom I would buy something cosmetic for her.

✓ Yes, last month I went to Japan for travel, and before the flight I promised my mom I would buy some cosmetics for her.

“for traveling”可改为名词短语“for travel”或直接“to travel”。“something cosmetic”不地道，复数名词“cosmetics”更常用；并用“some cosmetics”。保持过去时一致。

× But once I step on Japan I got distracted and forget what I should buy for her.

✓ But once I arrived in Japan I got distracted and forgot what I should buy for her.

原句时态混用："step on Japan"不自然，应为“arrived in Japan”；动词时态需与过去事件一致，使用过去式"got distracted"和"forgot"。建议使用“arrived in Japan/landed in Japan”。

× To keep the working text in my mind is my everyday routine.

✓ Keeping my work tasks in mind is part of my everyday routine.

原句“working text”不合适，意思不明确。用“work tasks”或“work-related tasks”更清晰；主语用动名词短语“Keeping...”使句子更自然。

× I almost spend most my morning time to deal with the clients requirements and after working I had lots of text to practice my language learning.

✓ I spend most of my mornings dealing with clients' requirements, and after work I have a lot of material to practice my language skills.

原句中“almost spend most my morning time”重复且结构不正确，应该是“spend most of my mornings”。“clients requirements”需所有格“clients' requirements”。“had lots of text”时态与语境不符，改为现在习惯用“have a lot of material”并用“language skills”。

× How do you remember important things? Student: I usually stayed and learn and check the labels on it to remind myself because I bring the smartphone every day, it's the best way for me to remember the crucial thing and I don't need to waste the paper to take a note.

✓ I usually stay organized, learn and check the labels on things to remind myself. Because I bring my smartphone every day, it's the best way for me to remember important things and I don't need to waste paper taking notes.

原句混用时态（"stayed"过去式与“usually”不搭配）且词语搭配不当（"check the labels on it"应为"check the labels on things"）。“bring the smartphone every day”应为“bring my smartphone every day”。“crucial thing”改为更自然的“important things”。将动词形式和时态统一为现在时，并调整搭配。