Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并注意语法与连贯性。开头可给出明确主题句，然后用一两句具体细节说明你怎么记不住和如何改进。注意避免片段句（如“Remember things.”）并使用连接词使句子更流畅。可以简化内容，最多五句。

例: Not really — I’m not very good at memorising things. For example, I sometimes forget my girlfriend’s anniversary, which is embarrassing. To avoid that I now write reminders on my phone and set calendar alerts so I don’t miss important dates.

提案: 答案需要更清晰的叙述和正确的词汇。现在句子有语法错误和不明晰的描述（如“song cosmetic”“step on the lens”）。应先简要回答，然后具体说明忘记了什么、原因和结果，使用连接词并纠正词汇错误。

例: Yes, once I forgot something important. Last month I travelled to Japan and promised my mother I would buy her some cosmetics, but I forgot to pick them up before the flight because I was rushing and distracted. I felt bad and apologised when I returned.

提案: 回答总体上合格，但语句可更自然并更具体。开头用一句总结性主题句，然后用1–2句具体例子（例如你要记住哪些工作细节、如何安排学习）。使用连词使逻辑更顺畅，注意词汇搭配（如“client requirements”而非“clients requirements”）。

例: I need to remember my daily work tasks and client requirements. For example, I have to keep track of emails and deadlines during the day, and in the evening I practise languages for about an hour to improve my speaking skills.

提案: 回答结构良好但要改进用词和流畅性。把片段合并成完整句，使用更自然的表达（例如“stick notes on the refrigerator”或“set phone reminders”），并保持具体细节。最多五句。

例: I usually write notes and stick them on the refrigerator so I see them every day. I also set phone reminders for deadlines. For example, I check my language study progress each evening to ensure I practise English enough.

× No, I'm not quite good there. Remember things.

✓ No, I'm not very good at remembering things.

句子结构和用法不自然。“good there. Remember things.”是断裂的两句，且动词形式错误。应使用固定搭配“good at + -ing”。建议把两部分合并为“good at remembering things”。

× For instance, sometimes I forget the anniversary days with my girlfriend.

✓ For instance, sometimes I forget our anniversary dates with my girlfriend.

中文说明：“anniversary days”在英语中通常说“anniversary”或“anniversary date(s)”。根据语境改为“anniversary dates”更自然。保持单复数与具体语境一致。建议使用“our anniversary dates”或“important dates”。

× Nowadays I try hard to do the notes to invoke my memory.

✓ Nowadays I try hard to take notes to jog my memory.

中文说明：动词短语应为“take notes”（记笔记），而不是“do the notes”。“invoke my memory”用法生硬，常用表达是“jog my memory”或“refresh my memory”。建议学习固定搭配。

× Yes I have, last month I went to Japan and I forgot to buy the things which my mom asked before taking the flights.

✓ Yes I have. Last month I went to Japan and I forgot to buy the things my mom asked for before I took the flight.

中文说明：句子要使用过去时一致性，分句间需断句。短语“asked for”是固定搭配，表示“请求买某物”。“taking the flights”不自然，改为“took the flight”。建议注意时态一致和固定搭配。

× I agree with her to buy the song cosmetic things for her but when I step on the lens I forget.

✓ I agreed to buy some cosmetic items for her, but when I arrived at the store I forgot.

中文说明：原句中“agree with her to buy”用法错误，应为“agree to do something”或“agreed to buy”。“song cosmetic things”可能是“some cosmetic things”的拼写错误；“step on the lens”语义不明，推测为“arrived at the store”。建议用清晰准确的短语并注意时态。

× Every day I need to remember substantial text about my work.

✓ Every day I need to remember substantial texts about my work.

中文说明：“text”在此处应为可数复数“texts”或改为“a substantial amount of text”。根据语境可能有多条信息需要记。建议根据具体意思选择单数或复数及量词。

× In the day I need to respond to all the clients requirements.

✓ During the day I need to respond to all the clients' requirements.

中文说明：时间短语应为“during the day”或“in the daytime”。“clients requirements”缺少所有格，应为“clients' requirements”。建议注意所有格和时间介词用法。

× After working I have some language learning to practice because I want to improve my speaking skills.

✓ After work I do some language practice because I want to improve my speaking skills.

中文说明：“After working”不太自然，常用“After work”。“have some language learning to practice”措辞笨拙，改为“do some language practice”。保持现在时表习惯性动作。建议使用常见表达。

× I take the note and adhere on the refrigerator.

✓ I take notes and stick them on the refrigerator.

中文说明：“take the note”应为“take notes”（记笔记）。“adhere on”是不自然的搭配，正确应为“stick something on”或“attach to”。建议记忆常用动词搭配。

× It is helpful for me to remember something I haven't finished.

✓ It helps me remember things I haven't finished.

中文说明：原句结构冗长且不自然。常用表达为“It helps me remember…”而非“It is helpful for me to…”。建议使用更简洁的句子结构。

× For instance, I will check my language learning process every day to make sure I get enough practice about English.

✓ For instance, I check my language-learning progress every day to make sure I get enough practice in English.

中文说明：“language learning process”更自然说“language-learning progress”；“get enough practice about English”中介词应为“in English”。另外把将来时改为一般现在时以表示习惯。建议注意名词搭配和介词选择。