Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は簡潔で直接だが、表現が不自然で詳細も曖昧です。まず文法と語順を正し、主題文（topic sentence）を明確にします。次に具体例を一つ付け加え、接続語（for example / because）で論理をつなぎます。語彙は“memorising”と“memory”の使い分け、”roads memorization”は自然な表現ではないため“remembering routes”などに直しましょう。文は最大5文に抑え、冗長な語句は省きます。

例: Yes, I think I'm quite good at memorising. For example, I can remember routes easily, so I rarely get lost in new neighborhoods. Because I often practise by retracing the way home, my sense of direction has improved. This helps me do well in practical driving tests and everyday navigation.

提案: 内容は具体的で会話らしいが、時制や語順、表現の誤りが目立ちます。まず時制（past simple）を統一し、意味が不明瞭な部分（"She was so shocked that I have to"）を修正します。理由や結果を示す接続語（so / therefore / as a result）を使い、どう埋め合わせしたかを一文で補足すると自然です。語彙は“girlfriend’s birthday”のエピソードを説明する語を増やしましょう。

例: Yes, I have. When I was in junior high school, I once forgot my girlfriend's birthday. She was very upset, so I apologised and planned a surprise dinner to make it up to her. As a result, we were able to move past it and became closer.

提案: 導入の曖昧な言い回し（"Umm it is so difficult question for me"）は不要です。まず直接答え（topic sentence）を述べ、その後に理由と具体例を一つ示します。複数形・単数形の一致（"birthdays"）を直し、接続語（because / for example / such as）で論理をつなぎます。語彙は“important dates”や“special occasions”などを使うと自然です。

例: I think remembering my family's birthdays is very important. For example, I always note them in my calendar because those days are special occasions to celebrate together. Remembering them helps me maintain close relationships.

提案: 表現が不明瞭で文法ミスが多く、方法の説明も曖昧です。まず直接に方法を述べ（"I use ..."）、次に具体的なテクニックとその頻度・タイミングを示します（e.g. "write in a planner", "set phone reminders", "review at night and in the morning"）。接続語（then / so / for example）で手順を整理し、簡潔に2–3文で述べましょう。

例: I use a few simple techniques to remember important things. For example, I write tasks and dates in a planner and set phone reminders, then I quickly review them at night and again in the morning. This routine helps me avoid forgetting important events.

× Yes I think so. I am good at roads memorization so I can get good score and my skill test.

✓ Yes, I think so. I am good at memorizing routes, so I can get a good score on my skill test.

The phrase 'roads memorization' is ungrammatical in English; the verb form 'memorization' should be replaced by the gerund/participle 'memorizing' and 'roads' should be 'routes' or 'road routes' to sound natural. Also add articles: 'a good score' and correct preposition 'on my skill test'. Suggestion: use 'memorizing routes' and include appropriate articles and prepositions. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Yes I have. When I was junior high school student I forgot my girlfriend's birthday. She was so shocked that I have to. I had to apologize and try to make up.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was a junior high school student, I forgot my girlfriend's birthday. She was so shocked that I had to; I apologized and tried to make up for it.

Tense inconsistency and missing articles: 'I was junior high school student' needs the article 'a'. 'She was so shocked that I have to' is incorrect tense and structure; 'had to' fits past context. Use past simple consistently: 'I apologized and tried to make up for it.' Also add punctuation and the preposition 'for' after 'make up'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Umm it is so difficult question for me but I think birthday of my family is so important things too remember because the day is so special.

✓ Umm, it is a difficult question for me, but I think my family's birthdays are important to remember because those days are so special.

Article and number errors: 'difficult question' needs the article 'a'. 'Birthday of my family' should be 'my family's birthdays' to refer to multiple birthdays. 'important things to remember' should be 'important to remember'. Maintain plurality agreement: 'birthdays... are' and 'those days'. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Umm, I think it is important to repeat for few times after at the end of the days and after they wake up after the day.

✓ Umm, I think it is important to repeat something a few times at the end of the day and again after you wake up the next morning.

Preposition and article misuse: use 'a few times' not 'for few times'. 'At the end of the day' is singular and idiomatic. 'After they wake up after the day' is unclear; change to 'after you wake up the next morning' or 'the following morning'. Also specify object 'something' or 'the information' and use parallel structure 'at the end of the day and after you wake up'. Grammar problem type ID: 11