Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接但语言有多处错误，句子结构与时态不准确，信息不够具体且有赘述。建议：用一到两句明确表态，然后用一到两句具体举例和方法；注意时态一致、主谓一致与拼写（e.g. "memorise/memorize"）、使用更自然的短语（e.g. "I often forget" 而不是 "I always forgot"）。避免冗长及重复。

例: I'm not very good at memorizing things. For example, I often forget where I put my keys or my phone, and I sometimes need more time to recall study materials than my classmates. To improve, I make brief review notes every evening to reinforce my memory.

提案: 叙述有条理但语言混乱、语法和词序错误多，细节表达不清晰。建议：先用一句主题句回答，再按时间顺序用2–3句叙述事件细节，使用正确时态（过去式描述过去事件），并用连接词如 "then"、"after that" 使逻辑清晰。纠正常见表达（e.g. "I left my phone"、"I calmed down"、"the waiter called me"）。

例: Yes — about a month ago I left my phone at a small restaurant after biking home. I realized it was missing and I calmed down, then I called my own number and the waiter answered. They brought the phone outside, so I always check my pockets before leaving now.

提案: 回答内容相关且包含解决方法，但表达不够简洁，存在词汇和语法错误（e.g. "heavy clothes load" 不当，用词不准确）。建议：用一句话概括需要记住的事项（课程、作业、截止日期），随后说明具体方法并用连接词衔接。改用恰当词汇如 "heavy course load"、"assignments"、"deadlines"。

例: As an undergraduate, I need to remember my classes, assignments and deadlines. I keep a weekly class timetable and set reminders on my phone, and I also use a planner to note assignment instructions so I don't miss anything.

提案: 方法描述明确但表达不够自然，存在词汇错误（e.g. "small card or tapes"、"notice"用法不当）和语法问题。建议：先给出总述，然后列举2–3个具体方法并用连接词连接，使用恰当词汇如 "sticky notes"、"set phone reminders"、"ask friends to remind me"，并说明效果或频率以增加细节。

例: I usually write important tasks on sticky notes and put them on my door, and I also set reminders on my phone. Sometimes I ask my girlfriend or friends to remind me, especially for urgent tasks, although I know they can forget too.

× No, to be frank, I'm not good at memorizing things and I always forgot things such as my keys, my phones.

✓ No, to be frank, I'm not good at memorizing things and I always forget things such as my keys and my phone.

原句中混用了时态（现在一般时与过去式）且代词使用和名词复数不一致。根据语境说的是一般习惯，应使用现在一般时“forget”。“my phones”通常应为“my phone”或“my phones”取决于是否有多部手机，这里列举常见物品应为单数“my phone”。建议保持时态一致并用并列连词“and”。

× In the study time I was difficult to remember the knowledge and consuming more time than my classmates.

✓ When studying, I found it difficult to remember what I learned and I took more time than my classmates.

原句中时态和句子结构混乱。应使用过去时描述过去的情况（found / took）。“In the study time”表达不自然，改为When studying；“consume time”要用过去式并配合主语，改为“took more time”。

× But I will make more effort and practice to chase them.

✓ But I will make more effort and practice to catch up.

原句用词不当：英文中“chase them”不符合“赶上学习进度”的表达，应使用短语“catch up”或“catch up with them”。动词搭配错误属于词汇选择，按题目要求归为时态/用法调整以匹配将来打算。建议使用固定搭配“catch up”。

× Definitely about a month ago I forgot my in a little restaurant when I bike home.

✓ Definitely, about a month ago I forgot my phone in a small restaurant when I biked home.

原句缺少宾语位置错误且时态混用。事件发生在过去，应使用过去式“biked”。“my”后需接名词（phone）。“little restaurant”在英式/美式口语中更常说“small restaurant”。

× I wanted to play games with my friends but I couldn't find my phone anymore.

✓ I wanted to play games with my friends, but I couldn't find my phone.

“anymore”在否定句中可用，但在此句中去掉“anymore”更自然。另外需要在并列句中加逗号以划分。建议保持简洁表达。

× After a minute I made myself calm down and recalled what was happened during that time.

✓ After a minute I calmed myself down and recalled what had happened during that time.

“make oneself calm down”不自然，改为过去式“calmed myself down”。“what was happened”错误地同时用了被动和过去时，应使用过去完成时“what had happened”表示在过去另一过去之前发生的事。

× I remember I was forgotten in the restaurant and made borrow my friends.

✓ I remember I had left it in the restaurant and I borrowed a friend's phone to call.

原句代词和被动结构错误。“was forgotten”不能表示“把东西落在某处”，应使用“left it”。“made borrow my friends”不合语法，表达应为“borrowed a friend's phone”或“made my friend lend me a phone”。建议使用主动语态和正确的动词短语。

× A phone made a call to the waiter, they send it to me outside.

✓ A waiter received a phone call and they sent my phone out to me.

原句逻辑和主语错误。“A phone made a call to the waiter”不合常理，应该是“someone called the restaurant”或“a waiter received a call”。时态一致需要过去式“sent”。代词指代要清晰，改为“they sent my phone out to me”。

× Every time I get out of the restaurant I will check if the phone in my pocket.

✓ Every time I get out of a restaurant I check that the phone is in my pocket.

习惯性动作用现在一般时而非“will”。句子缺少系动词“is”。建议用“check that the phone is in my pocket”或“check my pocket for the phone”。

× I'm an undergraduate student and I have a heavy clothes load, so I often forgot some classes.

✓ I'm an undergraduate student and I have a heavy course load, so I often miss some classes.

“heavy clothes load”用词错误，应为“course load”（课程负担）。“forgot some classes”时态和动词选择不当，表达应为现在习惯性动作“miss some classes”。建议用固定搭配“heavy course load, miss classes”。

× To deal with this, I make a class schedule and make some reminders on my phone.

✓ To deal with this, I make a class schedule and set some reminders on my phone.

“make reminders”不自然，常用动词为“set reminders”。句子为习惯性动作，使用现在一般时“make”。建议记住常用搭配“set reminders”。

× Besides that, I have many homeworks and its guidelines, so I use the planner to keep track of the to make sure I don't forget anything.

✓ Besides that, I have a lot of homework and its guidelines, so I use a planner to keep track of them to make sure I don't forget anything.

“homeworks”是不可数名词，应为“homework”或“assignments”。代词和指代不清，“the to”是残缺，应补全为“keep track of them”。注意“planner”前可加不定冠词。建议使用不可数形式和正确代词。

× Generally speaking, I will write them down in a small card or tapes and then I will put them up on the door or on my phone.

✓ Generally speaking, I write them down on small cards or tapes and then I put them on the door or save them on my phone.

习惯性行为用现在一般时而非“will”。介词搭配要改为“on small cards”。“put them up on the door”可改为“put them on the door”；手机上保存用“save them on my phone”。

× In that way I will remember the important things when I see the cars again.

✓ In that way I will remember important things when I see the cards again.

原句“cars”应为“cards”（便条卡）；拼写错误导致词义错误。保留“will”可以，但更自然用现在时“remember”。建议检查拼写以避免混淆单词。

× Apart from that, sometimes I will ask my girlfriend or my friends to notice.

✓ Apart from that, sometimes I ask my girlfriend or my friends to remind me.

动词“notice”用错，正确表达“提醒”应为“remind”。习惯性动作用现在一般时“ask”。代词“me”必不可少，确保意思完整。

× There was some important thing for me to do, even if sometimes they will forget the things too.

✓ There was some important thing for me to do, and sometimes they forgot it too.

句子时态混用且代词不一致。既然在描述过去，改用过去式“forgot”。同时“they will forget the things too”改为“they forgot it too”。建议保持时态一致并用恰当代词。