Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice and grammar (e.g. “intensive personality” -> “attentive nature”), avoid redundancy, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add a linking phrase to explain why it matters to you and give a brief specific example.

例: Yes, I'm quite good at memorising personal details such as friends' birthdays and favourite foods. Because I'm naturally attentive, I make an effort to remember these things, which makes my friends feel appreciated. For example, I often buy a small gift for my friend Anna on her birthday.

提案: Clarify and correct grammar; be specific about an example and use linking words. Avoid vague phrases like “Less time” and restructure sentences: state clearly that you sometimes forget unusual or infrequent events, then give one clear example and a brief reason.

例: Yes, I do forget important things occasionally, especially events that are infrequent or with people I'm not close to. For example, once I forgot an appointment with my daughter because I was busy at work and didn't set a reminder. Since then I try to double-check my calendar.

提案: Make the sentence grammatically correct and more natural. Start with a topic sentence, then give a specific detail and a linking word to explain why it matters. You can mention routine strategies briefly.

例: I need to remember simple daily tasks, especially whether I've taken my vitamins. Because it's easy to forget small routines, I usually keep the vitamin bottle on the kitchen counter as a visual reminder.

提案: Organise the response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to separate categories. Correct grammar and avoid repetition. Give one concise example for each tool to show how you use them.

例: I rely on digital tools such as calendars, reminders and note apps to remember important things. For example, I set daily reminders for medicine, put doctor appointments in my calendar with alerts, and use a note app for shopping lists or small tasks.

× I think it comes from the intensive personality.

✓ I think it comes from my intense personality.

The adjective 'intensive' is incorrect here; 'intense' is the correct adjective to describe personality. Also adding the possessive 'my' clarifies whose personality is meant. Use 'intense' to modify 'personality' and include the appropriate possessive pronoun.

× I feel like remembering these kind of things make my friends feel appreciated and laughed.

✓ I feel like remembering these kinds of things makes my friends feel appreciated and makes them laugh.

Use the plural form 'kinds' after 'these' (these kind of -> these kinds of). Subject-verb agreement requires 'makes' to match the singular concept 'remembering...'. Also 'and laughed' is incorrect; use 'makes them laugh' or 'makes my friends laugh' to show cause and correct verb form.

× Yes, although I have a good memory and sometimes forget things that don't happen usually like an appointment with someone you are not close to.

✓ Yes, although I have a good memory, I sometimes forget things that don't happen regularly, like an appointment with someone I am not close to.

Word order and adverb choice: 'usually' is better placed before the verb or use 'regularly'. Add a comma for clarity. Replace 'you are not close to' with 'I am not close to' to maintain first-person perspective and correct pronoun use.

× Less time I forgot that I had an appointment with my daughter.

✓ Once, I forgot that I had an appointment with my daughter.

'Less time' is incorrect; use 'Once' or 'One time' to indicate a single occasion. This corrects word choice and yields a natural expression in English.

× I take vitamins so remember if I have already taken the medicine or not is one thing I have to remember in my daily life.

✓ I take vitamins, so remembering whether I have already taken them is one thing I have to keep track of in my daily life.

Original sentence lacks smooth structure and correct verb forms. Use the gerund 'remembering' after the conjunction, replace 'if' with 'whether' for clarity, use 'them' to refer back to vitamins/medicine, and rephrase 'one thing I have to remember' to 'one thing I have to keep track of' for naturalness.

× If it is something that needs reminding like taking medicine I will use reminders and every something related to appointment like appointment with doctor I will use calendars and if it is something small I would use note app.

✓ If it is something that needs reminding, like taking medicine, I will use reminders. For anything related to appointments, like a doctor's appointment, I will use calendars. If it is something small, I would use a notes app.

Run-on sentence with incorrect phrasing and missing articles. Break into three clear sentences. Use gerund 'taking' correctly, add commas, use 'a doctor's appointment' for natural phrasing, and 'a notes app' or 'a note app' with the article. Use consistent modal forms ('will' for planned actions, 'would' for hypothetical small items) and pluralize 'notes app' which is more common.