Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, concise and confident. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid self-deprecating remarks that don't add information, and add one brief specific reason or example using a linking word. Keep it under 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, I often forget names because I don't use repetition, so I rely on notes to help me remember.

提案: Remove fillers and be specific. Answer directly, then give one or two concrete examples with a linking word (e.g., for example, once). This improves clarity and shows control of the topic within the sentence limit.

例: Yes, I have. For example, I once missed the date of a close friend's birthday and I also forgot an exam date, which made me late for registration.

提案: Keep the answer natural but concise and focus on specific daily items or routines. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why using a linking word. Avoid repetition and hesitations.

例: I need to remember to look after my wellbeing every day. For instance, I try to schedule short breaks and positive self-talk so I don't push myself too hard.

提案: Organise the list and use linking words for coherence. Start with a topic sentence stating your main method, then list two specific methods using linking words (e.g., first, also) and give a brief reason or result. Reduce hesitation and repetition.

例: I usually rely on my phone to remember important things. First, I add events to the calendar with reminders, and I also keep short notes for tasks so I get notifications and don't forget them.

× No, I'm not good at memorizing things because I don't think I'm good enough.

✓ No, I'm not good at memorizing things because I don't think I'm good enough.

No grammatical error matching the provided list. The sentence is correct; 'memorizing' is correctly used as a gerund (verb in present participle form functioning as noun). No change needed.

× Umm yes, I have forgotten important things like umm exams, birthday dates and so many other things. Important events.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten important things like exams, birthday dates, and many other important events.

The original had redundancy and informal fillers rather than a tense error. The present perfect 'have forgotten' is correct for experiences. Correction removes filler words and repeats, and adds commas for clarity. Suggestion: avoid 'umm' and combine short fragments into one clear sentence.

× Uh, I think I need to remember to love myself in my daily life that I, I don't have to go hard on myself.

✓ I think I need to remember to love myself in my daily life and that I don't have to be so hard on myself.

Original is disfluent and contains a clause connector error. '...in my daily life that I, I don't...' is ungrammatical. Use a coordinating conjunction 'and' and a clear adjective phrase 'be so hard on myself.' Suggestion: combine related ideas with conjunctions and avoid repetitions.

× Uh, how do I remember the important things? Sometimes I put it in my notes, sometimes I put it in like a calendar or like sometimes I just put it in put the information in my phone so I could see it in the calendar.

✓ How do I remember important things? Sometimes I put them in my notes or in a calendar, and sometimes I save the information on my phone so I can see it in the calendar.

Errors include incorrect pronoun number ('it' should be 'them' to match plural 'things'), repetition ('put it in put'), informal fillers ('like'), and tense/mood mismatch ('could' suggests past possibility). Use plural pronoun 'them', remove redundant words, and use 'can' for present ability. Suggestion: replace fillers with clear connectors and ensure pronouns agree in number.