Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., saying you remember then saying you don’t). Also watch for small grammar and collocation issues (e.g., "siblings' birthdays", "when I don’t remember something").

例: Yes, I'm fairly good at memorising things. For example, I always remember my siblings' birthdays, and if I have to remember something new I add it to my phone calendar so I won’t forget it later.

提案: Be specific and use past tense accurately. Start with a concise topic sentence, then provide a brief specific example with linking words (e.g., "For instance," "As a result"). Reduce filler words and correct small errors ("there have been many times" instead of "has been many times").

例: Yes, I have. For instance, I once forgot a close friend's birthday. As a result, I called her the next day to apologise and set a reminder in my calendar so it wouldn't happen again.

提案: Be realistic and avoid inappropriate or exaggerated phrases ("she would kill me"). Use formal contractions or full forms (avoid "wanna"). Provide one clear topic sentence and specific reasons; keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like "first" and "second" correctly.

例: I need to remember several personal dates. First, my own birthday because I like to celebrate it with family and friends. Second, my wife's birthday because it's important to show I care, so I set reminders well in advance.

提案: Provide a full topic sentence and combine repetitive sentences. Use correct grammar ("The calendar gives me") and linking words to explain benefits (e.g., "because", "so"). Be specific about methods (phone calendar, alarms, notes) to enrich the answer.

例: I mainly use my phone calendar to remember important dates because it lets me set alarms and organise events. For example, I set reminders a week and a day before birthdays so I have time to buy a gift and plan ahead.

× Oh yes, there has been many times where I've actually forgotten important dates.

✓ Oh yes, there have been many times when I've actually forgotten important dates.

The present perfect 'has/have been' requires agreement with the plural noun 'many times', so use 'have been' instead of 'has been'. Also, 'where' is less appropriate for referring to occasions; use 'when'. Suggestion: match auxiliary verb to the subject number and use 'when' for times or occasions.

× Recently, I forgot one of my best friend's birthday.

✓ Recently, I forgot one of my best friends' birthdays.

Possession and plurality are incorrect. 'One of my best friends' refers to one person among several friends, so the noun 'friends' should be plural with the apostrophe after s: 'friends''. Also, the thing forgotten is that person's 'birthday', so use the singular 'birthday' but attach possession correctly. Suggestion: for 'one of my X', make X plural and place the possessive apostrophe after the plural noun.

× Embarrassingly, I gave her a call the following day to apologize for the incident and make sure that I do not forget the next time.

✓ Embarrassingly, I gave her a call the following day to apologize for the incident and to make sure that I would not forget next time.

Parallel structure and tense consistency: after 'to apologize' the second verb should keep 'to' for parallel infinitive form. Also, because the action refers to a past incident, the clause 'I do not forget' should be shifted to past-in-the-past or reported past ('I would not forget' or 'I wouldn't forget') for consistency. Suggestion: keep infinitive parallelism and align tense to the time frame of the main verb.

× In my daily life, there are two things that I do need to remember.

✓ In my daily life, there are two things that I need to remember.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary for emphasis and sounds unnatural in this positive declarative sentence. Use simple present 'I need' to express habitual necessity. Suggestion: remove the redundant 'do' unless used for contrast or emphasis.

× The first thing is my birthday. I don't wanna forget my birthday because I want to celebrate with my friend and my family.

✓ The first thing is my birthday. I don't want to forget it because I want to celebrate with my friends and my family.

Use of 'wanna' is informal; replace with 'want to'. Also, avoid repeating 'my birthday' by using the pronoun 'it'. 'Friend' likely should be plural 'friends' to match 'family' and common usage. Suggestion: use 'it' for previously mentioned noun and use standard 'want to' in formal or semi-formal speech.

× The second thing is my wife's birthday. I do not wanna forget that because she would kill me if I do.

✓ The second thing is my wife's birthday. I do not want to forget it because she would kill me if I did.

Replace informal 'wanna' with 'want to'. Use pronoun 'it' for 'wife's birthday'. The conditional 'she would kill me if I do' requires past tense in the 'if' clause for a hypothetical present/future result: use 'if I did' (or 'if I were to'). Suggestion: use 'would + past' for unreal or hypothetical conditionals and avoid informal contractions in formal responses.

× Four important dates. I put them in my calendar.

✓ There are four important dates. I put them in my calendar.

'Four important dates.' is a sentence fragment (missing verb). Make it a full sentence by adding a verb phrase like 'There are' to state existence. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments in formal answers; ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× The calendar give me the ability to organize events and also to prioritize them.

✓ The calendar gives me the ability to organize events and also to prioritize them.

Subject 'The calendar' is singular, so the verb must be singular 'gives' not 'give'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees in number with its subject.

× The calendar also helps me to remember important dates so that I do not forget them.

✓ The calendar also helps me remember important dates so that I do not forget them.

The structure 'helps me to remember' is acceptable, but in conversational English 'helps me remember' is more natural. No tense change needed. Suggestion: omit 'to' after 'help' in this context for conciseness and naturalness.