Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and small grammar errors, and provide one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Also correct subject-verb and possessive errors (e.g., "my memories is" → "my memory is"). Keep responses under 4–5 sentences.

例: Yes, I have a good memory. For example, I can still recall the answers I got wrong on my Grade 12 math exam, which helped me study those topics more thoroughly. Because of this, I often remember important personal events from my childhood as well.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, use one clear example, and avoid unnecessary words like "obviously." Add a linking word to connect the example to the consequence. Keep the answer natural and concise.

例: Yes, I have. For example, I recently forgot a close friend’s birthday, so she called me about it and I had to apologize and make it up to her. As a result, I try to set reminders for important dates.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming specific items, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases (e.g., "whether at work or whether in my social life") and aim for natural phrasing.

例: Primarily, I need to remember my daily work tasks and key social commitments. For instance, I make sure to complete urgent work duties first and also keep track of plans with friends so I don’t miss appointments.

提案: Good clear answer and strategy. To improve, combine the two sentences into a smoother statement and add a brief example of a tool or habit. Use a linking word for flow and correct minor phrasing ("to not forget" → "not to forget").

例: I add important items to my digital calendar, and this helps me prioritize events and not forget key dates. For example, I set alarms for deadlines and birthdays so I receive reminders in advance.

× For example, I still remember that I failed substantially in Math 12 test exam.

✓ For example, I still remember that I failed substantially in the Math 12 exam.

Use of article and noun form: 'test exam' is redundant; 'exam' alone suffices and needs the definite article when referring to a specific exam. This is a past event correctly using past tense 'failed', but the phrase should be 'the Math 12 exam'. Suggestion: remove 'test' and add 'the' before the specific exam.

× I remember the answers that I failed and also I remember vividly some of my childhood memory.

✓ I remember the answers I got wrong, and I can also vividly remember some childhood memories.

Original has awkward phrasing and number agreement: 'answers that I failed' is unnatural; use 'answers I got wrong'. 'Some of my childhood memory' mixes singular 'memory' with 'some'; use plural 'memories'. Also combine clauses with 'and' and reposition 'vividly' for natural adverb placement.

× Therefore I believe that's my memories is great.

✓ Therefore I believe my memory is great.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun/reference errors: 'that's my memories is great' is ungrammatical. Use singular 'memory' with 'is', and remove 'that's'. Correct form: 'I believe my memory is great.'

× Yes, it has happened that I've forgotten many important things.

✓ Yes, it has happened that I have forgotten many important things.

This sentence is acceptable but using contraction 'I've' followed by 'forgotten' is fine; however to be explicit match style: expand contraction. Alternatively could say 'Yes, I have forgotten many important things.' The issue is clarity: prefer 'I have forgotten' or simple past 'I forgot' for specific instances. Suggestion: 'I have forgotten many important things.'

× For example, recently I forgot my friend's birthday.

✓ For example, I recently forgot my friend's birthday.

Word order: 'recently' normally comes after the subject or at the end; place 'recently' after 'I' for natural flow. Tense 'forgot' is correct.

× Obviously, she called me to let me know that I had forgotten her birthday and that I had to pay for it.

✓ Obviously, she called me to let me know that I had forgotten her birthday and that I had to make it up to her.

'Pay for it' is idiomatic for financial compensation, which likely isn't intended. Use modal/phrase 'make it up to her' to express compensating behavior. The past perfect 'had forgotten' is correct for earlier event relative to the call.

× I think I just need to remember the most important things first of all, all the responsibility that I need to carry out on a daily basis, whether at work or whether in my social life.

✓ I think I just need to remember the most important things first of all: all the responsibilities I need to carry out on a daily basis, whether at work or in my social life.

Count noun agreement and article use: 'all the responsibility' should be plural 'responsibilities' because multiple tasks are implied. Also streamline structure: replace comma with colon for clarity and remove redundant 'whether'. Suggestions: use plural 'responsibilities' and simplify 'whether at work or in my social life.'

× To remember important things, I simply add them to my calendar.

✓ To remember important things, I simply add them to my calendar.

This sentence is correct. 'To remember' (infinitive) purpose clause followed by present simple 'add' is appropriate. No change needed.

× Organizing my life around my calendar has greatly helped me to prioritize events but also to not forget important dates.

✓ Organizing my life around my calendar has greatly helped me prioritize events and not forget important dates.

Conjunction and infinitive form: use 'helped me prioritize' instead of 'helped me to prioritize' (both acceptable, but keep parallel structure) and use 'and' for parallel coordination. Avoid 'but also' when pairing with 'has helped' — use 'and' for positive additions. Maintain parallel structure: 'helped me prioritize events and not forget important dates.'