Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับโครงสร้างให้ชัดเจนและแก้ไขความถูกต้องของประโยค ใช้ linking words เล็กน้อยเพื่อความลื่นไหล และลดความซ้ำซ้อน แนะนำให้พูดเป็นประโยคหัวข้อแล้วอธิบายสนับสนุนอย่างชัดเจน เช่น บอกระดับความสามารถสั้นๆ แล้วให้ตัวอย่างและวิธีการที่ใช้จำ การปรับคำที่ผิด (เช่น renew → review) และแก้ไวยากรณ์ will improve coherence.

例: I’m not very good at memorising things. It usually takes me longer than my classmates because I need to review information several times. For example, before an exam I start revising a few days early and do many practice questions to help consolidate my memory.

提案: ประโยคมีความผิดไวยากรณ์และคำผิดหลายจุด ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงๆ จากนั้นอธิบายเหตุการณ์ สาเหตุและผลกระทบ ใช้ linking words (for example, because, so) และแก้คำผิด (meets → missed, feel that part → felt bad) เพื่อความชัดเจนและความเป็นธรรมชาติ

例: Yes, I have. In my final year at university, I once missed an important class because I overslept. The class had mandatory attendance, so I felt really bad and it affected my final grade.

提案: คำตอบควรชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ แก้คำที่ไม่ชัดเจนหรือสะกดผิด (เช่น trade Hamibu — หากหมายถึง ‘train timetable’ ให้แก้) เริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อแล้วให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น ตารางรถไฟและนัดหมาย ใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมความคิด

例: I need to remember my train timetable because I take the same train to work every day. I also keep track of appointments and deadlines in my phone so I don’t miss anything important.

提案: ประโยคมีคำและโครงสร้างผิดหลายจุด ควรให้หัวข้อแล้วอธิบายวิธีที่ใช้อย่างเป็นขั้นตอน แก้คำเช่น associate in profit → associate important dates, ailing → adding และใช้ตัวอย่างชัดเจนพร้อม linking words เพื่อความลื่นไหล

例: I usually associate important dates with something familiar. For example, I might link a friend’s birthday to a nearby holiday or to the birthday of a famous person, which makes the date much easier to remember.

× I am not very good at memorizing things.

✓ I am not very good at memorizing things.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses present simple to state a general ability.

× It usually takes me more time than my classmates with because I need to renew several times.

✓ It usually takes me more time than my classmates because I need to review several times.

The original has extra word 'with' and uses 'renew' incorrectly. Use 'because' to show reason and 'review' (go over material) is the correct verb. Structure: comparison 'more time than my classmates' is correct; remove 'with' which is unnecessary.

× For example, before an exam, I have to revise a few days earlier and do many practice questions to.

✓ For example, before an exam, I have to start revising a few days earlier and do many practice questions.

Original ends with extraneous 'to' and 'revise a few days earlier' needs 'start' to indicate when revision begins. 'Revise' is fine (British English); removing 'to' corrects sentence structure.

× In my final year as a special degree student, I once meets an important class because I overslept.

✓ In my final year as a special degree student, I once missed an important class because I overslept.

Use past tense 'missed' to match 'overslept' and the past time frame. 'Meets' is present tense and incorrect here.

× The class had mandatory attendance so I feel that part and it's affect my final result.

✓ The class had mandatory attendance, so I felt that I missed part of it and it affected my final result.

Several issues: tense consistency (past: 'had', 'felt', 'affected'), incorrect phrase 'feel that part' should be 'felt that I missed part of it', and 'it's affect' should be past 'it affected'. Add comma before 'so'.

× I try to remember the trade Hamibu because I take the same train to work every day and I also keep track of appointments so I don't miss important things.

✓ I try to remember the train timetable because I take the same train to work every day, and I also keep track of appointments so I don't miss important things.

Original 'trade Hamibu' seems to be incorrect word choice. Likely meant 'train timetable' or 'train name/number'. Use clear noun phrase 'train timetable'. Add comma before 'and' for clarity. Sentence otherwise uses present simple appropriately.

× I usually associate in profit of important dates with something familiar, For example, ailing a friend's birthday to a holiday, or a famous person born that day.

✓ I usually associate important dates with something familiar. For example, I link a friend's birthday to a holiday or to a famous person born that day.

Original has several wrong words: 'associate in profit of' is incorrect; use 'associate' or 'link' followed by object. 'Ailing' is wrong; should be 'link' or 'relate' a birthday to a holiday. Also split into two sentences for clarity and capitalize 'for example' properly. Use parallel structure: 'to a holiday or to a famous person'.

× This makes the day easier to recall because it's connected to an existing memory.

✓ This makes the day easier to recall because it's connected to an existing memory.

No change needed; present simple and contraction 'it's' correctly explain a general method for remembering.