Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and start with a clear topic sentence. Then add one specific example and a linking phrase to show coherence. Avoid repetition (saying 'phone' twice in similar ways).

例: Not really. I don't have a strong memory, so I often misplace my phone; for example, last week I left it on a café table and only realised when I checked my messages an hour later.

提案: Answer directly and give a brief specific example and a linking word to explain the method. Avoid repeating the phrase 'important things.'

例: Yes, I have. To avoid that I always write important tasks in my notes app; for instance, I once wrote down an appointment time and received a reminder so I didn’t miss it.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a linking word to explain why and how you remember. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I need to remember to exercise daily because I sit at a desk all day. Therefore, I set a recurring alarm at 6 pm and plan short 20-minute workouts to stay active.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, use linking words to connect methods, and include a specific example of how these tools help you (e.g., reminders or alerts). Correct minor grammar: 'I also tend to mark events.'

例: I rely on digital tools to remember important things: I write notes in a memo app and mark events on my calendar. For example, calendar alerts remind me 30 minutes before meetings so I have time to prepare.

× I often forget my phone or where my phone is and struggle to find it.

✓ I often forget my phone or where it is and struggle to find it.

Repeating 'my phone' is unnecessary and can sound awkward; replace the second instance with the pronoun 'it' for conciseness and natural phrasing. This also avoids a redundant singular noun phrase.

× For important things I usually write down in a memo so I will not forget the important things.

✓ For important things I usually write them down in a memo so I will not forget them.

The verb 'write down' requires a direct object; include 'them' to indicate what is written. Also avoid repeating 'the important things' twice by using the pronoun 'them'. The original mixes present habitual 'usually write down' with missing object rather than a true past-tense error, but the main issue is omitted object and redundancy, classified here as a past tense/object use fix to match the habitual present context.

× In my daily life, I have to remember to keep exercising because I sit all day and I will set an alarm to remind me.

✓ In my daily life, I have to remember to keep exercising because I sit all day, so I set an alarm to remind me.

Using 'I will set' suggests a future action but the context is a habitual routine; use simple present 'I set' to indicate a regular habit. This aligns tense consistently: present habitual for both remembering and setting alarms.

× Well, I tend to write down important things in a memo app on my phone and I also likely to mark events on my calendar so I will not miss them.

✓ Well, I tend to write down important things in a memo app on my phone and I am also likely to mark events on my calendar so I will not miss them.

After 'I' plus adjective 'likely', the correct structure is 'I am likely to ...' because 'likely' functions as an adjective requiring the verb 'be'. The original omitted the auxiliary 'am'. Also maintain 'so I will not miss them' as future intent; alternatively for habit use 'so I do not miss them'.