Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific example. Use linking words if you expand.

例: Yes, I am fairly good at memorising things because I have a kind of photographic memory. For example, I can remember pages from a textbook after reading them once, which helps me revise quickly.

提案: Organise your answer with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and give one concise specific example with a short consequence. Avoid filler words and repetition.

例: Yes, I have. For instance, yesterday I hurried to an interview but forgot to bring the required document, so I had to return home and missed part of the appointment.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence, then list one or two specific daily tasks using linking words for clarity. Correct pronouns and verb forms and avoid repeating phrases.

例: As a student, I need to remember several daily tasks. For example, I wake up early, have breakfast, attend classes, and most importantly complete assignments on time to avoid falling behind.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence describing your method, then briefly explain how it helps with a specific example. Use smoother phrasing and fewer repetitions.

例: I usually write important tasks in a small notebook that I carry with me. For instance, before exams I list deadlines and revision topics in that notebook, which helps me stay organised and not forget anything.

× I would say yes, I'm a little bit photographic person, so I have a little photographic memory which has which helped me to memorize the things for the long lasting days and.

✓ I would say yes, I'm a little bit of a photographic person, so I have a small photographic memory which has helped me to memorize things for a long time.

Errors: missing article and incorrect adjective use ('a little bit photographic person' should be 'a little bit of a photographic person' or better 'a slightly photographic person'); 'a little photographic memory' is awkward — use 'a small photographic memory' or 'a slightly photographic memory'; 'which has which helped' is redundant and incorrect; 'memorize the things for the long lasting days' is unidiomatic — use 'memorize things for a long time'. Suggestion: include necessary articles, remove redundant words, use natural adjective/adverb phrases and idiomatic time expression.

× Yes, many times whenever I have something important to do then I always forgot something something.

✓ Yes, many times when I had something important to do, I always forgot something.

Error: tense inconsistency — 'whenever I have' (present) conflicts with 'forgot' (past). Use past tense consistently for past events: 'when I had' and 'I always forgot'. Also remove repeated word and unnecessary 'then'. Suggestion: match verb tenses and eliminate repetition.

× So last day also there was my interview only in the morning, then I went there as soon as as possible as I can go fast.

✓ So the other day I had an interview in the morning, and I went there as quickly as I could.

Errors: 'last day' should be 'the other day' or 'the other day'/'the previous day'; 'there was my interview only in the morning' is awkward — use 'I had an interview in the morning'; 'as soon as as possible as I can go fast' mixes forms and tenses. Use past ability 'as quickly as I could' for a past event. Suggestion: use natural time expressions and consistent past tense verbs.

× Then at that time also I forgot to bring my important document for the interview.

✓ At that time I also forgot to bring my important documents for the interview.

Error: tense is acceptable but 'document' may be plural 'documents' depending on context; also word order 'Then at that time also' is redundant. Suggestion: simplify to 'At that time I also forgot to bring my important documents' and keep past simple 'forgot'.

× As I am a student, my daily routine is wake.

✓ As I am a student, my daily routine is waking up early.

Error: 'my daily routine is wake' uses base verb incorrectly. Use gerund for routines: 'my daily routine is waking up' or 'I wake up'. Suggestion: use gerund or simple present: 'I wake up' or 'my routine is waking up'.

× Wake up in the morning, have breakfast and go to university and complete your assignment and do a project work.

✓ I wake up in the morning, have breakfast, go to university, complete my assignments, and work on projects.

Errors: sentence uses imperative or inconsistent pronoun 'your' instead of 'my'; verb forms need consistency in simple present for routine; 'project work' is awkward — use 'work on projects'. Suggestion: use first person and parallel verb forms.

× So the most important thing I need to remember is to complete my assignment at time.

✓ So the most important thing I need to remember is to complete my assignments on time.

Errors: 'assignment' should be plural if referring generally; missing preposition 'on' in 'on time'. Suggestion: use plural for general habits and correct prepositional phrase 'on time'.

× Well, I don't remember many important things on my mind, so sometimes I take a note and write in on my small note which I take always with me.

✓ Well, I don't remember many important things, so sometimes I take a note and write it on a small notebook which I always carry with me.

Errors: 'remember many important things on my mind' is redundant; 'take a note and write in on my small note' has pronoun errors — 'write it on' not 'in on'; 'small note' should be 'small notebook' or 'note'; 'which I take always with me' word order awkward — 'which I always carry with me'. Suggestion: use correct pronouns ('it'), correct prepositions ('on'), and natural collocations ('carry with me').

× So it has helped me a lot to remember the important things. So I used to take a note of it important thing.

✓ It has helped me a lot to remember important things. I usually take a note of important things.

Errors: 'I used to take a note' suggests past habitual action; context indicates present habit, so use 'I usually take a note'. 'of it important thing' is ungrammatical — reorder to 'a note of important things' or 'note important things'. Suggestion: use appropriate expressions for present habits and correct noun phrases.