Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答案能直接回应问题并给出例子，但存在语法错误、重复和用词不当，表达不够自然。注意动词时态和单复数（e.g. "I often forget", "reminder apps"->"a reminder app"或"reminder apps"），避免重复词（如多次“I”或“re”），并把例子整合成两到三句完整且连贯的回答。可用连接词如“so”或“for example”使逻辑更清晰。

例: I'm not very good at memorising things; I'm quite absent-minded. For example, I often forget when I need to leave for school or miss project deadlines, which has caused problems. So recently I started using reminder apps and checklists to help me stay organised.

提案: 内容具体且有因果，但语法和句子结构混乱（重复单词、时态不一致、词序错误），且有口语填充词。重构为两至三句：先说明事件，再说明后果，最后给出改进方法。使用正确动词形式和冠词（"a phone reminder", "a weekly schedule"）。

例: Last term I missed an online project deadline because I underestimated how long it would take. As a result I received a lower grade. Since then I've started using phone reminders and a weekly schedule to manage my time better.

提案: 回答清晰、内容相关且具体，但句子较长且可更精炼。可适当分句并用连接词增强流畅度，注意一致性（"organized"与前文时态一致）。可加入一两个更具体的例子（如"doctor's appointments"或"bill payments"）以丰富内容。

例: I need to remember my daily schedule and appointments because I don't want to be late. Every morning I check my phone calendar and set alarms for meetings, study sessions or bill payments so I can manage my time effectively.

提案: 回答直接且相关，但有小语法错误（"Every mornings"->"Every morning", "notifications allows me"->"notifications remind me"），以及部分词汇搭配不当。可把信息压缩为两句并用恰当动词，列举例子时用并列结构。

例: I set reminders in my smartphone's calendar app and check it every morning to see upcoming tasks. Notifications remind me of important events, such as work meetings, bill payments and family birthdays.

× I often forgot things.

✓ I often forget things.

句子中描述的是经常性的习惯动作，应使用一般现在时而不是过去时。将“forgot”改为“forget”以表示经常发生的情况。建议：表示习惯或常态使用一般现在时（I often + 动词原形）。

× I sometimes miss the time I need to leave for school or forget important projects deadlines.

✓ I sometimes miss the time I need to leave for school or forget important project deadlines.

“projects deadlines”中名词复数和名词所有格/名词短语搭配错误。应使用“project deadlines”或“projects' deadlines”。在此语境下使用复数名词作定语时不加复数后缀，所以改为“project deadlines”。

× So recently I I started using a reminder apps and said. Bitcoin allows and checklist to help me stay organized.

✓ So recently I started using reminder apps and a checklist to help me stay organized.

原句存在多处问题：重复“I I”、动词与名词单复数不一致、插入了无关词汇“said. Bitcoin allows and”，句子结构混乱。将重复词删除，修正为“reminder apps and a checklist”，并移除无关短语以恢复通顺。建议：写句子前先理清要表达的工具项，然后保证主谓一致和名词单复数正确。

× One time last term I had a project that I needed to submit online, but I missed the deadline because I underestimated how long the work would take.

✓ One time last term I had a project that I needed to submit online, but I missed the deadline because I had underestimated how long the work would take.

句中描述的是在过去事件发生之前的一个想法（低估了所需时间），应使用过去完成时“had underestimated”来表示在过去某一时间之前已经发生的动作，从而体现时间顺序。

× As a result I re re received a lower grade and since then I was studied.

✓ As a result I received a lower grade and since then I have studied hard.

原句有重复“re re”，并且“since then I was studied”语法错误。“received”为过去发生的事，正确；“since then”表示从那时到现在的持续状态，应使用现在完成时（have studied），并且“study”需用主动形式，若要强调努力学习加上“hard”。建议：使用现在完成时表达从过去延续到现在的动作或状态。

× Uh, using phone reminder and a weekly schedule to admit to manage my time better.

✓ Uh, I use phone reminders and a weekly schedule to help me manage my time better.

原句缺少主语和正确的动词形式，“using”开头导致从句不清楚，且“admit to”不合适。将句子改为完整的主谓结构“I use... to help me...”并修正名词复数和搭配（phone reminders）。建议：确保句子有明确主语和谓语，使用“to help”表示目的。

× Well, I usually need to remember my schedule and any appointments because I don't want to be late or miss important events and it helps me stay organized.

✓ Well, I usually need to remember my schedule and any appointments because I don't want to be late or miss important events, and it helps me stay organized.

原句总体时态正确，但缺少逗号以分隔并列分句，导致可读性下降。此处主要建议是标点修改以清晰表达逻辑关系。建议：在长句中用逗号分隔并列分句以便更清楚。

× For example, I check my calendar on my phone every morning and set different alarms or reminders for meetings and deadlines so I can manage my time effectively.

✓ For example, I check my calendar on my phone every morning and set different alarms or reminders for meetings and deadlines so that I can manage my time effectively.

原句语法正确，但在正式书面表达中在目的从句前加“so that”更为清晰。此处属于风格改进而非错误，但依照清晰度建议添加“that”。

× Well, just like I mentioned, I set the reminders in my smartphone's calendar app.

✓ Well, just like I mentioned, I set reminders in my smartphone's calendar app.

“the reminders”暗示特指，但此处为一般行为，使用不定泛指“reminders”更自然。建议：当泛指某类事物时可省略定冠词或使用不定冠词，具体视上下文而定。

× Every mornings I check my calendar to see upcoming tasks and appointments.

✓ Every morning I check my calendar to see upcoming tasks and appointments.

“Every mornings”中“every”后应接单数名词，正确形式为“every morning”。建议记住短语“every + 单数名词”。

× And notifications allows me when something important is due, for example work meeting, bill payments or family birthdays.

✓ And notifications alert me when something important is due, for example work meetings, bill payments or family birthdays.

原句中主语“notifications”（复数）与动词“allows”（单数）不一致，应使用复数动词“alert”或“allow”改为“allow me to know”。另外“work meeting”应为复数“work meetings”与前文保持一致。建议：注意主谓一致，复数主语用复数动词；并使用合适动词搭配（notify/alert/allow someone to do）。