Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, reduce hesitation sounds (uh), and provide one specific example of a memorising technique or situation. Use a clear topic sentence followed by a brief supporting detail and one linking word.

例: Yes, I am fairly good at memorising things because I study medicine and often need to learn large amounts quickly. For example, I use flashcards and spaced repetition to remember anatomy terms, so I can review them efficiently before exams.

提案: Give a complete, coherent answer with clear grammar and specific details. Start with a direct statement, then explain what was forgotten, why it happened, and the result. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid trailing off.

例: Yes, I have. About two years ago, during the most important semester of my studies, I forgot to bring an important set of notes to an exam because I was very stressed and left early without checking my bag. As a result, I struggled during the test and learned to prepare a checklist the night before.

提案: Correct grammar (e.g., 'an old' -> 'the eldest') and be specific about duties. Use linking words to list tasks and explain why they matter. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: As the eldest daughter in my family, I need to remember household chores and maintenance tasks. For example, I clean common areas, check the bathroom supplies, and arrange for the technician when appliances break, so the home runs smoothly.

提案: Use correct verb forms and finish sentences; avoid filler words. State a method (e.g., calendars, alarms, lists) and give a specific example of how you use it. Use linking words to show cause and effect.

例: I rely on a digital calendar and alarms to remember important things, because my university schedule is busy. For instance, I set reminders for lectures and study sessions on my phone and review the week every Sunday to make sure I don't miss anything.

× Yes, I think I'm good at memorizing things, uh, due to the fact that I'm an medical student.

✓ Yes, I think I'm good at memorizing things, because I'm a medical student.

Use 'a' before words starting with a consonant sound; 'an' is incorrect before 'medical'. Also simplify 'due to the fact that' to 'because' for clarity and naturalness.

× So we have been required to memorize the all of these subjects in a, uh, short period, Yeah.

✓ We have been required to memorize all of these subjects in a short period.

The phrase 'the all of these' is incorrect; use 'all of these' or 'all these'. Remove unnecessary articles and fillers and place 'in a short period' without extra commas.

× Yes I have forgotten something important.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something important.

Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech pause. The tense is acceptable (present perfect) for unspecified past experience; only punctuation needed.

× For example it was around like 2 years ago I it was my most important semester of exam and I have forgot my.

✓ For example, it was around two years ago during my most important exam semester, and I forgot something important.

Sentence had repetition, missing object, incorrect verb form 'have forgot' (should be 'forgot' or 'have forgotten') and awkward phrasing. Use 'two' for numbers under ten in formal writing, combine clauses clearly, and use simple past 'forgot' for a specific past time.

× As a old daughter in my family, I have a lot of duties at my home.

✓ As an old daughter in my family, I have a lot of duties at home.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound ('old'). 'At my home' is less natural than 'at home'. Consider using 'eldest daughter' if meaning oldest child rather than 'old'.

× For example, I need to clean the house and I need to check, check of the, uh, bathrooms, technician room, something like that.

✓ For example, I need to clean the house and check the bathrooms and the technician's room, and so on.

'Check of the' is incorrect; use 'check the'. Use possessive 'technician's room' if appropriate. Remove repeated 'check' and filler words for clarity.

× As a young and medical student, I'm really good at uh, remember the important things.

✓ As a young medical student, I'm really good at remembering important things.

'Good at' requires a noun or gerund, so use 'remembering'. Also remove the extra 'and' before 'medical' and filler 'uh' for clarity.

× For example, like uh, my university schedule, schedule is most important, and I never ever forgotten my schedule for the week, so I have never.

✓ For example, my university schedule is the most important, and I have never forgotten my weekly schedule.

Remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'like'. Use 'the most important' with the definite article. Correct verb form: 'have never forgotten' (present perfect). 'Schedule for the week' simplified to 'weekly schedule'. Remove trailing incomplete clause.