Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question first (e.g. “No, I'm not very good at memorising things”), then give one clear, relevant example. Use correct tense and avoid irrelevant or confusing details. Use linking words (for example, because) to make the story coherent. Keep it under five sentences.

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, when I was a child I forgot how to walk properly for a while after breaking my leg, so I couldn’t keep up with my friends and cried for two hours. This made me realise I often forget important physical routines. Because of that, I try to practise repeatedly to remember them.

提案: Start with a direct answer (“Yes, I have”) then tell one concise, chronological story. Use correct grammar (age: “when I was 14”; past tense consistently) and add a clear consequence or reaction. Use linking words like “so” or “because” to show cause and effect. Keep it to three sentences if possible.

例: Yes, I have. When I was 14 I forgot my mother’s birthday, so she was very upset. I bought her a gift afterwards, but she refused it because she was hurt by my forgetfulness.

提案: Answer directly and clearly (e.g. “I need to remember my class schedule and appointments”). Use specific examples and correct phrasing (“set alarms” or “use a planner”) instead of vague phrases like “do a clocks.” Link problem and solution: explain why it’s hard and what you do to help. Keep it within three sentences.

例: I need to remember the start times of my English lessons and other school classes. It’s difficult for me, so I set alarms on my phone and write the schedule in a planner. This helps me arrive on time.

提案: Start with a direct statement of your strategy (e.g. “I write things down”). Give specific methods (notes, calendar, alarms) and a brief reason why they help. Avoid unclear phrases like “too life easy.” Use linking words such as “so” or “therefore” to connect problem and solution. Keep it to three sentences.

例: I usually write important dates down in a calendar and set phone reminders. For example, I record birthdays and holidays and set alerts a few days in advance. This way I don’t forget and it reduces my stress.

× I'm not that good at memorizing things. For example when I was a kid I broke my leg and I forgot about that and I want to walk with my friend but I can't so I cried about that over 2 hours.

✓ I'm not that good at memorizing things. For example, when I was a kid I broke my leg and I forgot about it. I wanted to walk with my friend but I couldn't, so I cried about it for over two hours.

Multiple verbs describe past events, so past tense should be used consistently (broke, forgot, wanted, couldn't, cried). 'That' referring to the injury is better as 'it'. 'Want' should be past 'wanted'; 'can't' should be past 'couldn't'. Use 'for over two hours' to express duration. Also add a comma after 'For example' for clarity.

× Oh yes, I want to share one story. Uh when I was a 14 I forgot about my mother's birthday and she was so mad and I buy for her gift but she wants she doesn't want to have it.

✓ Oh yes, I want to share a story. When I was 14 I forgot my mother's birthday and she was so mad. I bought her a gift but she didn't want it.

Maintain correct tense for past events: 'forgot', 'was', 'bought', 'didn't want'. Use 'a 14' -> '14' or '14 years old' and 'a story' instead of 'one story'. 'Buy for her gift' is incorrect word order; use 'bought her a gift'. Remove redundant 'she wants'.

× In daily life I need to remember when I start my English classes or school classes, but it's hard for me and I need to uh, do a clocks.

✓ In daily life I need to remember when my English or school classes start, but it's hard for me and I need to use a clock or set reminders.

For habitual facts use Simple Present: 'classes start' not 'I start'. 'Do a clocks' is ungrammatical — use 'use a clock' or 'set reminders'. Also streamline 'English classes or school classes' to 'my English or school classes'.

× I'm bad at memorizing so I need to write about that like birthdays, holidays and for me it's too life easy.

✓ I'm bad at memorizing so I need to write those things down, like birthdays and holidays, and it's much easier for me that way.

Use correct phrasing: 'write those things down' (verb + particle) to mean record reminders. 'Write about that' is awkward. 'Too life easy' is ungrammatical; use 'much easier for me' or 'it makes life easier for me'. Also keep consistent structure when listing examples.