Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Reduce hesitation and filler words; use correct grammar (e.g. 'good at memorising' and 'I'm not good at memorising').

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, I often forget names and appointments because I don't use any memory techniques, so I rely on reminders on my phone.

提案: Answer directly and give a specific example of an important thing you forgot. Use one linking phrase (for example/for instance) and correct tense and vocabulary. Avoid vague expressions and repetition.

例: Yes, I have. For instance, last month I forgot an important meeting at work because I mixed up the dates, so I learned to double-check my calendar and set alerts.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming specific items you must remember daily (e.g., keys, appointments). Then add one brief reason or method using a linking word such as 'because' or 'so'. Keep sentences simple and grammatical.

例: I need to remember things like my keys, my phone, and any scheduled meetings, because forgetting them can make me late or disrupt my plans.

提案: Explain a specific method you use to remember important things (or admit you don't use methods and state a consequence). Use clear sentences and one linking word (for example/therefore). Avoid fragmented speech and unclear phrases like 'it's governed by'.

例: I usually set reminders on my phone and write important tasks in a planner; therefore, I rarely miss deadlines. If I don't plan ahead, I tend to forget important events.

× To be honest, uh, not that much because I'm forgetting things easily so I'm not a good uh, with memorizing.

✓ To be honest, not really, because I forget things easily so I'm not good at memorizing.

The student used 'forgetting' (present participle) where simple present 'forget' is appropriate for habitual actions (Present tense issue, ID 6). 'Not that much' is informal; 'not really' is clearer. Also 'good with memorizing' is incorrect preposition use; the correct phrase is 'good at memorizing' (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). Use simple present for habits and 'good at' for ability.

× Ha, that's the daily routine. I'm forgetting everything called things does happen every day, so I'm forgetting easily as I mentioned before. So yeah.

✓ Ha, that's my daily routine. I forget things; this happens every day, so I forget things easily as I mentioned before.

The student repeatedly used present continuous 'I'm forgetting' for habitual actions; the simple present 'I forget' is correct for routines (Present tense issue, ID 6). 'Called things does happen' is ungrammatical and should be rewritten as 'this happens' (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Remove redundancy and use clear subject-verb structures.

× Maybe I will need to focus on things, which is I want to more or remember it, yeah.

✓ Maybe I need to focus on the things I want to remember more, yeah.

The original mixes future 'will need' unnecessarily and uses an incorrect relative clause 'which is I want to more or remember it.' Use simple present 'need' for general preference (Present tense issue, ID 6) and correct word order: 'the things I want to remember more' (Incorrect order of words, relates to Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Also remove unneeded pronoun 'it'.

× Actually, I don't know. I don't have any idea about it's coming. It's coming, uh, naturally. So when I, when, when I need to remember this, uh, the crucial things, uh, it's governed by.

✓ Actually, I don't know. I have no idea when it will come; it comes naturally. So when I need to remember something important, it just happens naturally.

'I don't have any idea about it's coming' mixes structures and misuses contraction 'it's' for 'it is' in an incorrect clause; use 'I have no idea when it will come' (Future tense issue, ID 7, and Incorrect use of pronouns, ID 12). 'It's coming' for habitual occurrence should be 'it comes' (Present tense issue, ID 6). 'The crucial things, it's governed by' is incomplete and ungrammatical; rewrite to a complete clause 'it just happens naturally' (Sentence structure errors, ID 26).