Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary phrases. Also correct verb forms (e.g., "people say", "memorize").

例: Yes, I am fairly good at memorising. In my family people often say I can remember facts quickly, and when preparing for exams I usually learn key points faster than my cousins, which helps me finish revision earlier.

提案: Answer directly and use past tense correctly. Avoid rhetorical questions like "Who never..." which can sound informal. Give a brief example and link ideas with connectors. Limit to three sentences maximum.

例: Yes, I have. Once, despite studying all night, I blanked on the main topic during an exam, which was extremely frustrating. Since then I try to sleep well before tests to avoid that happening again.

提案: Be specific about what you need to remember and use linking words to show contrast. Keep sentences grammatical and concise, and avoid contradictory phrasing. Provide one or two concrete examples of items or tasks you must remember.

例: I need to remember daily appointments and small items like my keys. However, because I've been stressed lately I sometimes leave my keys on the table, so I now use a designated bowl by the door to avoid this.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence describing your main method, then give specific details and link them. Use natural phrasing ("I take notes" rather than "taking notes of that in piece of information") and avoid exaggerated or unclear phrases.

例: I usually remember important things by taking brief notes and reviewing them regularly. For instance, I write a short to‑do list each morning and skim it during breaks, which helps me complete tasks without forgetting them.

× Yes, generally in my family most of the people says that I'm very good at memorizing all the information and I am very quick to adapt to the things.

✓ Yes, generally in my family most people say that I'm very good at memorizing information and I am very quick to adapt to things.

The plural subject 'most people' requires the plural verb 'say' (subject-verb agreement). 'Most of the people' can be shortened to 'most people'. 'All the information' is redundant with 'memorizing' so 'information' is sufficient. 'Adapt to the things' is awkward; 'adapt to things' is more natural. Suggestion: Use plural verbs with plural subjects and simplify noun phrases for clarity.

× If I have an exam then I am the first one to memorize it quickly, then my other cousins.

✓ If I have an exam, I am the first one to memorize the material quickly, before my cousins.

The original mixes sequence with incorrect comparative phrasing. 'Then my other cousins' is not a complete clause. Use 'before my cousins' to show sequence. No past tense change needed because this is a general habitual statement (zero conditional). Also replace 'it' with 'the material' for clarity.

× Who never forgets something? I am also one of them.

✓ Who never forgets something? I am not one of them.

The student intended to say that everyone forgets things, and they also forget sometimes. The original 'I am also one of them' is confusing after a rhetorical question 'Who never forgets something?'. Better: 'I am not one of them' or 'I also forget things.' Suggestion: Match the response to the intended meaning; if admitting forgetfulness, say 'I also forget things.'

× I usually forgot the main topic when I'm writing my exam and it's the most frustrating feeling in the examination hall.

✓ I usually forget the main topic when I'm writing my exam, and it's the most frustrating feeling in the examination hall.

Mixes past tense 'forgot' with present progressive 'I'm writing'. For habitual actions use present simple 'forget'. Keep tense consistent: 'I usually forget' and 'when I'm writing my exam' is acceptable. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× When you spent a night learning all of that thing, all the knowledge from the book, and you forget, it's a miserable feeling.

✓ When you spend a night learning all that material, all the knowledge from the book, and then you forget it, it's a miserable feeling.

The clause should be in present tense for a general statement: 'When you spend' not 'spent'. 'All of that thing' is ungrammatical; use 'all that material' or 'all that information'. Add 'then' and 'it' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent for general truths and choose appropriate nouns.

× As I am more stressed these days, I often forget very minute details about my schedule, my daily routine.

✓ As I am more stressed these days, I often forget very small details about my schedule and daily routine.

'Very minute' is awkward; 'very small' or simply 'minute' is better. Use 'and' instead of a comma before 'daily routine' to connect two related items. Tenses are otherwise appropriate.

× But nowadays I'm trying to build up on my memory and working on it, so I usually forget my keys on my table whenever I'm leaving the home.

✓ But nowadays I'm trying to build up my memory and working on it, so I usually leave my keys on the table whenever I leave home.

'Build up on my memory' is incorrect collocation; use 'build up my memory' or 'work on my memory'. 'Forget my keys on my table' should be 'leave my keys on the table'. 'Whenever I'm leaving the home' is unnatural; use 'whenever I leave home'. Also keep verb forms parallel: 'I'm trying... and working' is okay but better: 'I'm trying to build up my memory and work on it.' Suggestion: Use correct verb patterns and natural collocations.

× I remember every detail by taking notes of that in piece of information as it helps me remember the important tasks which I have to follow up through the day.

✓ I remember every detail by taking notes of the information, as it helps me remember the important tasks I have to follow up on during the day.

Incorrect prepositions: 'taking notes of that in piece of information' is ungrammatical. Use 'taking notes of the information' or 'making notes'. 'Follow up through the day' should be 'follow up on during the day'. Suggestion: Use 'follow up on' for tasks and 'during the day' for time expressions.

× The short notes revision is the most preferential revision I'll ever do in my life.

✓ Reviewing short notes is my preferred way to revise.

'Most preferential' is incorrect; 'preferential' is not used with 'most' in this context. Native phrasing: 'my preferred way' or 'the revision I prefer'. Also avoid redundancy 'revision... revise'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations like 'preferred way to revise.'