Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意句子结构和流利度，避免重复。先用一句明确的主题句直接回答（Yes/No），然后用一两句简洁具体的细节和原因。注意动词形式和单复数（memorizing, things are），避免停顿和自我修正。

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. I often forget information within a few minutes because I don't use any memorisation techniques. For example, if I read a number quickly I usually can't recall it later unless I write it down.

提案: 回答已较好：主题句清楚并提供了具体例子。可以进一步用一两句说明后果或感受并使用连接词使叙述更流畅，例如mentioning how you avoided it later. 注意时态和连接词的使用。

例: Yes, once I forgot my wallet when I went out with friends. I only realised it at the restaurant, so I had to ask a friend to pay for me, which was really embarrassing and taught me to check my bag before leaving.

提案: 句子冗长且语法错误（主谓一致、重复词）。应先给出主题句（I need to remember...），然后简短列举并用连接词解释每项的重要性。避免含糊的表述（"other things can throw"不清楚）。

例: I need to remember my wallet, ID card and mobile phone. My wallet holds money and cards, my ID proves who I am for official matters, and my phone helps me contact others and navigate.

提案: 回答思路清楚但表达重复且有语法问题。先用一句话说明主要方法（I write sticky notes），然后用一两句具体描述使用场景和位置，使用连接词（so, for example）使表达更连贯。

例: I usually write sticky notes to remember important things. For example, I stick them on my door, computer or desk so I see them before I leave or start working.

× Actually do say that.

✓ Actually, I wouldn't say that.

原句不完整且结构不自然，缺少主语和助动词，表达意思不明确。建议使用完整的否定句“I wouldn't say that”来表达“我不这么认为”。注意使用逗号分隔插入语。

× So I'm not good at memorizing things because I think that the things for me to memorize is very difficult.

✓ So I'm not good at memorizing things because I think the things I have to memorize are very difficult.

原句主谓不一致且定语从句结构错误。“the things for me to memorize”不自然，应改为“the things I have to memorize”。主语“the things”是复数，谓语应为“are”。

× I can I always forget when things just like a few minutes, even the important things.

✓ I always forget things after just a few minutes, even important ones.

原句有冗余和断句错误，重复“I can I”错误。将时间状语放在谓语后并使用简洁代词“ones”替代重复名词，使句子更自然。

× Yes, once I forgot my wallet when I went out with friends to meet and discuss something.

✓ Yes, once I forgot my wallet when I went out with friends to meet and discuss something.

句子时态使用正确，无需改动。保持过去式描述过去发生的事件是恰当的。

× I only realized it at the restaurant so I had to ask my friend to pay for me which was embarrassing.

✓ I only realized it at the restaurant, so I had to ask my friend to pay for me, which was embarrassing.

原句缺少必要的标点导致从句衔接不清。添加逗号以分隔原因状语和非限制性定语从句，提高可读性。

× I think that the important things I need to remember in my daily life is my wallet and my ID card and my mobile phone, because these things are is very important in our daily life.

✓ I think the important things I need to remember in my daily life are my wallet, my ID card and my mobile phone, because these things are very important in our daily life.

原句存在主谓不一致和重复动词“is”。主语“the important things”为复数，谓语应为“are”。去掉重复词并用逗号分隔并列项。

× The ID card can show us identification and other things can throw.

✓ The ID card can prove our identity, and other items can be used for various purposes.

原句结构混乱且“show us identification”与“other things can throw”不通顺。改为更自然的表达“prove our identity”，并把第二部分改为被动或更明确的用途描述。

× I usually remember important things to write some notes on the smart ticket, which I can, which it can be very easily for me to stick everywhere, no matter the door or the computer or on my desk.

✓ I usually remember important things by writing notes on sticky notes, which I can easily stick everywhere, like on the door, the computer or my desk.

原句动词形式和介词短语使用错误。“remember to write”与原意不符，应使用“remember ... by doing”结构表示记忆的方法。将“smart ticket”改为常用表达“sticky notes”，并修正“which I can, which it can be very easily”冗长错误，使用“which I can easily stick”。