Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation and redundancy, use correct grammar (e.g., ‘memorise’ not ‘memorized person’), and give one or two specific examples with linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Not really. I often forget small items like my car and bike keys, so I have to retrace my steps to find them. Because of this, I try to keep my keys in a fixed bowl by the door, which helps me avoid losing them.

提案: Start with a concise yes/no and give a clear example with reasons and consequence. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct tense and word forms. Avoid filler words and repeat only one or two supporting details.

例: Yes, I have. For example, I once forgot a close family member’s birthday because I didn’t set a reminder, which upset them. Since then, I use calendar alerts so I don’t miss important dates.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence listing key daily items, then add one specific strategy or example using linking words. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘handbag’, ‘documents’) and avoid repetition.

例: I need to remember basic everyday items such as my keys, wallet, shoes and important documents. For example, I always put my keys in a bowl by the door so I can grab them quickly when I leave.

提案: Begin with a topic sentence stating your method, then give a brief example of how you use it. Use correct verb forms and fewer fillers. Include linking words to show cause and effect (e.g., ‘so’, ‘because’).

例: I use alarms and calendar reminders on my smartphone to remember important tasks. For instance, I set an alarm for bill payments and a calendar event with a notification for appointments, so I don’t miss anything.

× I'm not good at memorized person because I usually forgot some car keys and bike keys and, and, uh, always I remember, uh, I repeat my words and repeat my, uh, things where I kept and where, what is I got to say that like that I have.

✓ I'm not good at memorising things because I usually forget my car keys and bike keys, and I often have to repeat myself and try to remember where I kept things.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms and awkward structure. 'memorized person' is incorrect; the correct noun/gerund is 'memorising things' (gerund form). 'forgot' should be present tense 'forget' to match 'usually' (habitual action) — this is a present tense issue (use of past instead of present habitual). 'always I remember' is unnatural; use 'I often have to repeat myself' to express the intended meaning. Also fix word order and redundancy for clarity. Suggestion: use gerunds for abilities (good at memorising), use simple present for habitual actions (I usually forget), and use natural English collocations (repeat myself, where I kept things).

× Yeah, I forgot, uh, some important days be, uh, because my family's, uh, members birthdays and specials engagements and marriage events, I forgot that they have.

✓ Yes, I forget some important days, such as my family members' birthdays and special engagements and weddings.

The speaker mixes past and present and uses incorrect structures: 'I forgot' with 'because' then 'they have' is unclear. If referring to a habitual problem, use simple present 'I forget'. Possessive plural should be 'family members'' (apostrophe after plural). 'specials engagements' should be 'special engagements' and 'marriage events' is better as 'weddings'. Also avoid redundant 'I forgot that they have.' Suggestion: choose tense consistent with meaning (habitual -> present), use correct plural possessive and standard nouns.

× I have to remember that. It's so bad for me. But some particular time, I remember that and it's good for me.

✓ I have to remember them. It's bad for me. But sometimes I do remember, and that feels good.

Tense and number problems: 'that' should be plural 'them' if referring to multiple events. 'Some particular time' is unnatural; use 'sometimes'. 'I remember that' mixes tenses; use simple present for habitual statements ('I do remember'). Also adjust phrasing to sound natural. Suggestion: match pronoun number to referents, use 'sometimes' for frequency, and use 'do' for emphasis in present tense.

× Basically I have to remember the daily life base is called where I kept my keys, where I kept my kept my hand back like that I have to remember and uh like normal basic things like a keys, car keys and shoes, handbags and some important documents.

✓ Basically I have to remember everyday things like where I kept my keys, my handbag, car keys, shoes and some important documents.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'daily life base is called' is incorrect and unnecessary. Use 'everyday things' to convey the idea. 'where I kept' should be 'where I keep' if habitual, but 'kept' could be used if referring to past placements; here habitual present is better: 'where I keep my keys'. Also article and plural errors: 'a keys' is incorrect—use plural without 'a'. 'hand back' likely intended 'handbag'. Suggestion: use 'everyday' as adjective, use simple present for habitual locations ('where I keep'), correct articles and plurals, and use correct nouns.

× I kept some alarm in my smartphones or in my laptop like that.

✓ I set some alarms on my smartphone and laptop.

Incorrect verb and noun forms: 'kept some alarm' is wrong; the correct collocation is 'set an alarm' or 'set alarms'. Use singular 'smartphone' for each device, or 'my smartphone and laptop'. Preposition is 'on' for devices. Also use simple past 'set' if referring to completed action or present 'I set alarms' for habitual. Suggestion: use collocation 'set an alarm' and preposition 'on'.

× When I open the phones, I it's automatically come to my screens, home screen and it's Ala.

✓ When I open my phone, it automatically appears on my home screen.

Word order and pronoun issues: 'I it's automatically come' is ungrammatical. Use subject 'it' (the alarm or notification) and verb 'appears'. 'phones' should be singular 'phone' if referring to one device; 'my home screen' is correct. Remove unclear 'Ala'. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb order (subject + verb), use 'appears' for onscreen notifications, and use singular/plural consistently.

× It's remember you have to do this, you have to do that. Like that. It Remember Me always.

✓ It reminds me to do this or that. It always reminds me.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'It's remember you' is incorrect; 'remind' is a transitive verb: 'it reminds you/me'. Capitalization 'Remember Me' is irrelevant in speech. Also adverb placement: 'always' should come before the verb or after the object ('always reminds me' or 'reminds me always' less common). Suggestion: use correct verb 'remind' with object pronoun, and place adverbs appropriately.