Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition and make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of what you can memorize and why. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid overuse of vague phrases like "everyone was amazed."

例: Yes, I’m quite good at memorising things. For example, I can remember song lyrics and vocabulary quickly because I practise them daily. As a result, my teachers often ask me to help classmates learn new words.

提案: Make the timeline and details clearer and correct grammar (e.g. "yesterday" not "on yesterday"). Give a brief cause and consequence, and use linking words like "because" and "so" to structure the response. Avoid redundant phrases such as "I've just thought of it."

例: Yes, I have. For example, yesterday my teacher assigned homework through an app, but I went to a friend’s house for a sleepover and forgot to do it. Because I didn’t check the app, I only remembered the assignment just before class and had to apologise to the teacher.

提案: Be more specific about the types of tasks and give one or two concrete examples. Use linking words such as "for example" and "also" to organize points. Keep sentences varied and avoid repeating "I need to remember."

例: As a student I need to remember deadlines for assignments and dates for exams. For example, I always note upcoming essays and lab reports in my calendar, and I also set daily practice times for piano so I don’t fall behind.

提案: Clean up grammar and make sentences more natural. Introduce the method with a topic sentence, explain briefly how it works, and give a specific example of an app or routine. Replace vague phrases like "Remember Me" with the actual app name or "reminder apps."

例: I usually use reminder apps on my phone to remember important tasks. For example, I enter deadlines into my calendar app and set alerts a day before and an hour before, so I never miss assignments.

× And it just happened on yesterday.

✓ And it just happened yesterday.

The preposition 'on' is unnecessary before 'yesterday'. Use 'yesterday' alone to indicate a day in the past. Suggestion: omit 'on' when using adverbs of time like 'yesterday'.

× my teacher assigned a few homeworks on the app

✓ my teacher assigned a few homework tasks on the app

'Homework' is an uncountable noun in English and should not take a plural form with 's'. Use 'homework' or a countable phrase like 'homework tasks' or 'assignments' to express multiple items. Suggestion: use 'a few homework tasks' or 'a few assignments'.

× I went to my friend's house to have a sleepover.

✓ I went to my friend's house for a sleepover.

While 'to have a sleepover' is understandable, the natural collocation is 'for a sleepover'. This is a word choice/preposition combination that improves fluency. Suggestion: use 'for a sleepover' in similar contexts.

× So I definitely left those homeworks behind my head.

✓ So I definitely left that homework behind.

Multiple issues: 'homeworks' is incorrect (homework is uncountable) and the phrase 'behind my head' is not used to mean 'forgotten' or 'left somewhere'. Use 'left that homework behind' to indicate forgetting to bring it. Suggestion: use 'left it behind' or 'left the homework behind'.

× And yeah, I've just thought of it before the class.

✓ And yeah, I just thought of it before class.

Present perfect 'I've just thought' is not appropriate with 'before class' which is a specific past time; simple past or present perfect with 'just' can be used depending on context. Here simple past 'I just thought' or present perfect 'I had just thought' (if earlier than another past event) is better. Also 'the class' is unnecessary; say 'before class'. Suggestion: use 'I just thought of it before class.'

× For example, academic assignments and some homework that I need to do.

✓ For example, academic assignments and homework I need to do.

'Some homework that I need to do' is wordy; 'homework' is uncountable and does not need 'some' here. Removing 'some' and 'that' makes the sentence more natural. Suggestion: streamline to 'assignments and homework I need to do.'

× Personally I tend to use my phone to Remember Me.

✓ Personally, I tend to use my phone to remind me.

'Remember Me' is incorrect word order and capitalization; the verb phrase should be 'remind me' when something (an app) causes you to remember. Also add a comma after 'Personally' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'use my phone to remind me' or 'use reminder apps'.

× Like you can use the apps to write down what you need to do and it will remind you on the screen.

✓ For example, you can use apps to write down what you need to do, and they will show reminders on the screen.

Use 'for example' rather than 'like' for formal speech. 'Apps' is plural so use 'they' not 'it'. 'Remind you on the screen' is awkward; say 'show reminders on the screen' or 'display a reminder on the screen'. Suggestion: 'you can use apps to write down tasks, and they will display reminders on the screen.'

× So to prevent forgetting things. That was a great way.

✓ So, to prevent forgetting things, that is a great way.

The original has a sentence fragment 'So to prevent forgetting things.' and an inconsistent tense 'That was a great way.' Combine into one coherent sentence and keep present tense to describe a general method: 'that is a great way.' Suggestion: join clauses and maintain present tense for general truths.