Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp và có ví dụ cá nhân, nhưng câu quá dài, lặp từ và có vài lỗi ngữ pháp/điệp từ (ví dụ: "I said", "memorizing" vs British spelling OK). Cần rút gọn câu chủ đề, chia thành tối đa 3 câu, dùng liên từ hợp lý và sửa lỗi nhỏ để tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I'm quite good at memorizing things. I usually make short lists of new vocabulary and review them every day, which helps me retain words more effectively. I also write brief notes and repeat them out loud when I have time.

提案: Câu trả lời có câu chủ đề và kể chuyện cá nhân, nhưng chứa lỗi ngữ pháp ("it's when", duplicate word "message message", "missed the change" unclear) và thiếu liên từ để mạch lạc. Nên sửa các lỗi, rút gọn và thêm kết luận ngắn về bài học rút ra.

例: Yes, I have. I once missed an important interview because I mixed up the date and only realized when the company messaged me. I felt really embarrassed, and since then I've set phone reminders so it doesn't happen again.

提案: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng có lỗi câu và từ vựng không chính xác ("miss this line", "meetings stacks"). Cần dùng từ phù hợp, cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn, và giới thiệu 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể để minh họa. Giữ tối đa 3 câu.

例: I need to remember my daily schedule and important deadlines. If I forget them I might miss appointments or important meetings, which causes problems. To avoid this I check my planner every morning and set phone reminders.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý rõ nhưng nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, sắp xếp từ không chính xác và câu ngắt quãng ("writing to A to do list", "Notifies me"). Nên dùng các câu hoàn chỉnh, sửa lỗi chia động từ, và cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể ngắn gọn.

例: I usually write tasks in a to-do list and set reminders on my phone. This system works because my phone notifies me when something is due. For example, I put recurring bills and appointments in my calendar and check it every morning.

× I said I'm quite good at memorizing things because I often use simple methods like writing notes and repeating them, for example, when I learn new vocabulary and make a short list and review it every day, and this helps me remember words better than ever.

✓ I said I'm quite good at memorizing things because I often use simple methods like writing notes and repeating them. For example, when I learn new vocabulary I make a short list and review it every day, and this helps me remember words better.

The original sentence is a run-on with incorrect clause linking. Break into shorter sentences and remove redundant or awkward phrasing. Use present simple for habitual actions (I learn, I make, I review). Ensure clauses are clearly separated to improve readability.

× Well for sure I have. I once forgot an important interview because I messed up the date and I only realized it's when I got a message message from the company.

✓ Well, for sure I have. I once missed an important interview because I messed up the date and I only realized it when I got a message from the company.

Use the past tense 'missed' instead of 'forgot' for attending an appointment; 'realized it' not 'realized it's'. Remove repeated word 'message'. Maintain past simple for completed actions.

× I was really embarrassed and I missed the change so after that I always read reminders on my phone.

✓ I was really embarrassed and missed the chance, so after that I always set reminders on my phone.

'Missed the change' is incorrect collocation; use 'missed the chance' or 'missed the opportunity' or 'missed the appointment'. Use 'set reminders' rather than 'read reminders' for action of creating reminders. Add comma before 'so' to separate clauses.

× Well, I need to remember my daily schedule and deadlines. They're important because if I forgot them I could miss this line and meetings stacks and that causes problems.

✓ Well, I need to remember my daily schedule and deadlines. They're important because if I forget them I could miss deadlines and meetings, and that would cause problems.

Use present simple in conditional real present: 'if I forget' not 'if I forgot'. 'Miss this line and meetings stacks' is unclear; replace with 'miss deadlines and meetings'. Use 'would cause' or 'that would cause' to match conditional meaning.

× For example, I check my planner every morning and set phone reminders so I don't forget.

✓ For example, I check my planner every morning and set phone reminders so I don't forget things.

Add object 'things' for clarity. The verbs 'check' and 'set' are correct in present simple for habitual actions. No tense change needed.

× Uh, actually I usually remember important things by writing to A to do list and setting for reminders.

✓ Uh, actually I usually remember important things by writing a to-do list and setting reminders.

Do not use 'writing to A to do list' — correct phrase is 'writing a to-do list'. Remove unnecessary preposition 'for' after 'setting'. Use hyphenated 'to-do' as a compound noun.

× It works for me because I can see everything clearly in my phone. Notifies me when I need to do something.

✓ It works for me because I can see everything clearly on my phone. It notifies me when I need to do something.

Use preposition 'on' with 'phone' not 'in'. Combine fragments into complete sentences: 'It notifies me...' instead of sentence fragment 'Notifies me...'. Ensure subject 'It' is present.

× For example, I put same days and bill payments in my calendar and check it every morning.

✓ For example, I put recurring events and bill payments in my calendar and check it every morning.

'Put same days' is incorrect; use 'recurring events' or 'regular dates'. Use 'in my calendar' is acceptable but 'on my calendar' is also common; keep 'in' if preferred. Clarify noun phrase 'same days' to make meaning clear.