Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct articles and number agreement, avoid repetition, and use one or two supporting details with a linking word. For example, say you use notes and briefly explain how they help.

例: Not really — I'm quite forgetful, so I usually write things down. For example, I keep a short to‑do list on my phone, which helps me remember small tasks quickly.

提案: Give a concise direct answer with clear tense and fewer hesitations. Use a brief explanation and a linking word (e.g., because or so) to clarify why it mattered and one detail about the outcome.

例: Yes. A month ago I missed a doctor’s appointment, which was very upsetting because it was important for my treatment, so I had to reschedule and wait another two weeks.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence and specific examples. Avoid filler words and combine ideas using linking words like 'and' or 'so'. Mention how you prioritise or organise these items.

例: Mostly I need to remember my phone and the tasks I have for the day. To manage this, I prioritise three main tasks each morning and put them in my phone’s reminders so I don’t forget them.

提案: Use correct tense and smoother phrasing. Start with a clear present-tense topic sentence, add one linking phrase to explain why the method works, and give a brief specific example of the system you use.

例: I usually make a list on my phone, because it’s quick and searchable. For instance, I create daily checklists with deadlines and set alarms so I can quickly review what I must do.

× No, I'm very forgetful person.

✓ No, I'm a very forgetful person.

Missing article 'a' before the noun phrase 'very forgetful person'. Use 'a' with singular countable nouns. Suggestion: include 'a' when describing oneself with a noun phrase (I'm a student, I'm a careful driver).

× I usually forget a small things, so I keep a note.

✓ I usually forget small things, so I keep a note.

The determiner 'a' is singular and cannot be used with plural 'things'. Remove 'a' to match plural noun. Also 'small' is fine as adjective before plural noun.

× So I keep a note of the things to keep my mind.

✓ So I keep a note of things to help me remember.

The phrase 'to keep my mind' is awkward and ungrammatical in this context. Rephrase to 'to help me remember' which conveys the intended purpose and correct verb usage.

× Work very well, Works very well.

✓ It works very well.

Fragmented utterances lack a clear subject. Use 'It works very well' to refer back to the note-taking method. Ensure subject-verb agreement and capitalisation.

× Yes, I remember a month ago I forgot my appointment to the doctor and it was terrible feeling for me because it's such it's, it's a very crucial thing to remember.

✓ Yes, I remember that a month ago I missed my appointment with the doctor and it was a terrible feeling for me because it was a very crucial thing to remember.

Tense inconsistency and awkward prepositions: 'remember a month ago I forgot' mixes present 'remember' with past event — keep 'I remember that' or simply 'A month ago I missed...'. Use 'missed' rather than 'forgot my appointment to the doctor'; use preposition 'with' for appointments. Also replace 'it's such it's, it's' with clear phrasing and match past tense 'was'.

× Well, well, I usually need to remember my phone and some task to complete.

✓ Well, I usually need to remember my phone and some tasks to complete.

Use plural 'tasks' because 'some' typically modifies plural countable nouns. Also remove redundant 'well'.

× Because I usually forget things, so I want to keep a note.

✓ Because I usually forget things, I want to keep a note.

Avoid using both 'because' and 'so' together; this creates redundancy and a run-on structure. Use one conjunction to express cause or result.

× I often took a note and make a list on my phone because it's. Very easy and I can rapidly go through the list.

✓ I often take a note and make a list on my phone because it's very easy and I can quickly go through the list.

Tense inconsistency: 'took' is past while context requires habitual present 'take'. 'It's. Very' incorrectly split by a period. Use 'quickly' (adverb) rather than 'rapidly' for natural speech. Ensure sentences are complete and consistent in tense.