Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and repeated words.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, I always keep my phone and keys in a designated tray by the door, so I can find them quickly when I need them.

提案: Organise your answer with a brief topic sentence then give a specific sequence of events using linking words (for example, first/then/finally). Correct basic grammar (tense, word order) and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, once last Sunday I forgot my husband’s bike keys. First, I misplaced them and couldn’t remember where I had put them; then he got upset, but finally we found them under a coat on the chair.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence followed by specific examples and avoid filler words. Use linking words like for example or such as, and be concise (max 3–4 short sentences).

例: I need to remember essentials like my phone and keys every day. For example, I always place them on a small tray on my bedroom desk so I can grab them before I leave.

提案: Answer with a clear method and one specific example. Avoid hesitations and correct simple grammar (use present simple: I set alarms). Use linking words to connect general method and example.

例: I usually set alarms or calendar reminders on my phone to remember important tasks. For example, I set a daily alarm to remind me to take my medicine in the morning.

× I know which which place I keep my things.

✓ I know which place I keep my things.

The sentence repeats 'which' erroneously. Remove the duplicate to make the pronoun phrase correct and concise. Also the clause 'which place I keep my things' functions as a noun clause referring to location.

× I always I am very tidy.

✓ I am very tidy.

The sentence contains a redundant subject 'I' and an extra 'always'. Use a single subject-verb phrase. If you want to include 'always', write 'I am always very tidy.' but keep one subject and one verb.

× I always keep my things on their places because I know when it's time to need that.

✓ I always keep my things in their places because I know when I will need them.

Use 'in their places' or 'in their place' rather than 'on their places'. The clause 'when it's time to need that' is unnatural; use 'when I will need them' or 'when I need them'. Also replace 'that' with the pronoun 'them' to refer to plural 'things'.

× Yes, last Sunday I forgot my husband's bike keys.

✓ Yes, last Sunday I forgot my husband's bike keys.

This sentence is correct in past tense; no change needed. It is included to indicate that past tense usage here is appropriate.

× I don't remember I which I keep keep them so he's out.

✓ I don't remember where I kept them, so he was locked out.

Replace incorrect word order 'I which I keep keep' with 'where I kept' for correct question word and past tense. 'So he's out' is unclear; 'he was locked out' or 'he couldn't get in' is more natural.

× He started shouting on me but finally it finds.

✓ He started shouting at me, but eventually he found them.

Use 'shouting at me' not 'shouting on me'. 'Finally it finds' is ungrammatical; use 'eventually he found them' to indicate the keys were found.

× So yes, I forgot something.

✓ So yes, I forgot something.

This sentence is grammatical and appropriate in past simple to answer the question; no change needed.

× I remember my phone and keys, uh, which I uh, always put on there, uh, put on their specific place, uh, for example, uh, I uh, always put them, uh, on uh, uh, uh, the, on the desk, uh, on my, in my room.

✓ I remember my phone and keys, which I always put in their specific place. For example, I always put them on the desk in my room.

Replace 'put on there' with 'put in their specific place' and remove filler words. Use 'in' for location 'in their place' and 'on the desk' for surface. Clean sentence structure into two clear sentences.

× Uh, I put the alarm or reminder on my phone, which Remember Me, uh, about the morning, uh, important things and, uh, important days.

✓ I set an alarm or reminder on my phone to remind me about important things and dates in the morning.

Use 'set' instead of 'put' for alarms. 'which Remember Me' is incorrect and should be 'to remind me'. 'Important days' is clearer than 'important days' but 'dates' or 'events' can be used. Adjust infinitive 'to remind' to show purpose.

× Uh, for example, uh, for example, my, uh, I always forgot my medicine, Uh, so I always alarming on phone.

✓ For example, I always forget my medicine, so I always set an alarm on my phone.

Use present simple 'forget' for habitual action, not past 'forgot'. Use 'set an alarm' rather than 'alarming on phone'. Clean filler words and use correct verb forms for habitual behaviour.