Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Hãy trả lời trực tiếp hơn bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh tiếng ừ (uh) và lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ "those information" nên là "that information"). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể để minh họa cách bạn ghi nhớ (ví dụ: phương pháp, ví dụ thực tế), sử dụng liên từ để giữ mạch lạc. Giữ độ dài tối đa 4-5 câu.

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I am a visual learner. For example, I use mind maps and labelled pictures to remember vocabulary and facts. When I encounter a difficult exam question, I visualise the related diagram or chart and this helps me recall the information quickly.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời ngắn gọn và rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và dùng ngữ pháp chính xác ("those information" → "that information"). Nên giải thích nguyên nhân và hậu quả cụ thể, dùng liên từ để nối ý. Tránh tiếng lấp đầy như "umm"; thay vào đó dùng một câu giải thích thêm.

例: Yes, I once missed a day of school because the schedule change wasn’t announced to me. As a result, I missed an important lecture and had to ask classmates for notes, which taught me to check notices and set calendar reminders.

提案: Cải thiện: Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng số ít/phức hợp chính xác ("things"), tránh cấu trúc lặp. Nên thêm lý do ngắn gọn và có thể một ví dụ cụ thể về lịch trình. Sử dụng liên từ để làm mạch lạc như "because" hoặc "so".

例: I need to remember several daily tasks, but the most important is doing laundry regularly. Because I have few clothes, I schedule washing every two days so I never run out of clean clothes for the next day.

提案: Cải thiện: Câu trả lời đã rõ ràng nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp nhỏ ("To Do List" → "a to-do list", "before start my day" → "before I start my day", "be slipped my mind" → "slip my mind"). Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về công cụ hoặc phương pháp (ứng dụng, màu sắc, lời nhắc) và dùng liên từ để kết nối ý.

例: I usually write a to-do list and take notes before I start my day. For example, I use a notes app with reminders and colour-code tasks so I can follow steps easily and prevent anything from slipping my mind.

× I find it is easy for me to memorize multimedia such as pictures or maps.

✓ I find it easy to memorize multimedia such as pictures or maps.

The phrase 'find it easy' does not require the preposition 'for me' after 'find' when the subject is already 'I'. Removing 'for me' creates a more natural and concise sentence. Suggestion: say 'I find it easy to memorize...' or 'It is easy for me to memorize...'.

× Uh, if I found a difficult question in the test, I would recall those information.

✓ Uh, if I found a difficult question on the test, I would recall that information.

Errors: incorrect preposition ('in' -> 'on' for tests), incorrect determiner/pronoun agreement ('those information' -> 'that information' because 'information' is uncountable), and conditional meaning fits past simple in the if-clause with 'would' in the result clause for hypothetical past; keep as is if speaking hypothetically. Suggestion: use 'on the test' and treat 'information' as uncountable with 'that' or 'the'.

× Of course, yes, I forgot to go to school because no one announced those information to me.

✓ Of course, yes, I forgot to go to school because no one announced that information to me.

Error: 'those information' is incorrect because 'information' is an uncountable noun and cannot take the plural demonstrative 'those'; use 'that information' or 'the information'. Also 'announced' is acceptable past tense. Suggestion: use 'that information' or 'the information'.

× Umm. Overall, this was the worst memo, the worst thing that I have done.

✓ Umm. Overall, this was the worst mistake I have made.

Problems: 'memo' is likely the wrong word for an error; 'the worst thing that I have done' is awkward and inconsistent with 'was' earlier. Use 'mistake' and match tense: 'this was the worst mistake I have made' or 'this was the worst mistake I ever made'. Suggestion: choose consistent tense and appropriate noun 'mistake'.

× Well, there are many thing that I need to remember every day but what comes to my mind first is what I should wash my clothes every day because I don't have a lot of clothes and if I don't wash it I will not have clothes to wear in the next day.

✓ Well, there are many things that I need to remember every day, but the first thing that comes to my mind is that I should wash my clothes every day because I don't have a lot of clothes, and if I don't wash them I will not have clothes to wear the next day.

Errors: 'many thing' -> 'many things' (plural), awkward clause order 'what comes to my mind first is what I should wash' -> 'the first thing that comes to my mind is that I should...', 'a lot of clothes' is fine, pronoun agreement 'if I don't wash it' -> 'wash them' because 'clothes' is plural, and 'in the next day' -> 'the next day'. Suggestion: correct plural forms and pronoun agreement, simplify clause structure.

× I usually take notes or make To Do List of everything I need to do before start my day.

✓ I usually take notes or make a to-do list of everything I need to do before I start my day.

Errors: 'To Do List' should be lowercased and countable with an article 'a to-do list'; missing subject 'I' before 'start my day' and verb form should be 'start' with 'I' (present simple). Suggestion: include article and subject: 'a to-do list' and 'before I start my day'.

× This is because I want to do everything step by step.

✓ This is because I want to do everything step by step.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. No change necessary. Explanation: structure is fine; 'do everything step by step' correctly expresses sequential action. (Included to indicate checked per instructions.)

× Additionally, I don't want any task be slipped my mind.

✓ Additionally, I don't want any task to slip from my mind.

Errors: incorrect passive construction 'be slipped my mind' is ungrammatical. Use active infinitive 'to slip' and correct preposition 'from my mind' or simply 'I don't want any task to slip my mind'. Suggestion: say 'I don't want any task to slip my mind' or 'I don't want any task to slip from my mind'.