Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 语法和时态不够准确，表达有重复与冗余；句子结构不够简洁自然。建议：1) 注意时态一致（过去与现在的对比要用正确时态）；2) 用更自然的短句开头主题句，然后用一两句具体细节补充；3) 删除重复词语并使用连接词（e.g. but, however）使衔接更顺畅。举例：用‘I used to be good at memorising things when I was at primary school, but I find it harder now’，随后补充具体例子和原因。

例: I used to be good at memorising things when I was at primary school, for example I could recite a whole article after reading it once. However, I find it harder now because I don’t practise memorisation as much.

提案: 句子有严重语法错误和重复（e.g. 'forgot to forget'），表达不完整且结尾含糊。建议：1) 使用正确的时态和动词形式（planned → planned to go; forgot to bring/take）；2) 开始用直接的主题句回答，然后用一两个具体细节说明后果及感受；3) 避免不必要的重复并确保结尾完整。

例: Yes. Once I planned to go to Korea last year, but when I reached the airport I realised I had forgotten my passport, so I couldn’t board the flight and felt very embarrassed.

提案: 用词不当（'make a plane'应为'make a plan'）和表达可更简洁；内容具体但可用连接词改善逻辑。建议：1) 纠正词汇错误并用主题句直接回答；2) 用连接词列举日常事项（for example, such as, and）；3) 保持句子不超过5句并适当拓展细节，比如如何制定计划或用什么工具记住。

例: I usually make a plan for the next day and keep it in my mind. For example, I note when to wake up, my meals and important appointments, and I often set alarms to help me stick to the schedule.

提案: 表达较清晰但有小问题（'writing them down on a sticker'可更自然为'stick notes'或'post-it'；'remind other people to tell me'表达不够准确）。建议：1) 用更自然的短语描述记忆方法；2) 用连接词说明首选方法和备用方法（for example, also）；3) 提供一两个具体工具或场景以增强具体性。

例: I usually write important things on Post-it notes or record them on my phone. For example, I set reminders and alarms, and sometimes I ask my parents or friends to remind me if something is urgent.

× I still remember that when I was in the primary school. I can recite the whole article once. I only read it once, but now I find it a little bit difficult to memorizing things.

✓ I still remember when I was in primary school. I could recite the whole article after reading it once, but now I find it a little bit difficult to memorize things.

错误类型：动词+ -ing（不定式/动名词混淆）。句中应使用不带 -ing 的动词不定式或动词原形（to memorize 或 memorize），在这里与动词 find 连用应使用动词原形或不定式 to memorize。建议：将“memorizing”改为“memorize”。另外，将“in the primary school”改为“in primary school”，将“can recite... once”改为更符合语境的过去能力“could recite... after reading it once”。

× Well, I think I used to good at memory things.

✓ Well, I think I used to be good at remembering things.

错误类型：过去时及动词缺失。“used to”后需跟动词原形，且原句缺少系动词 be；“memory things”不自然，应改为动名词短语 remembering things。建议：在 used to 后加 be，并用 remembering 替换 memory things。

× I can recite the whole article once.

✓ I could recite the whole article after reading it once.

错误类型：现在时/过去时不一致。说的是过去的能力，应使用过去时 could，并且表述更自然为“after reading it once”。建议：把 can 改为 could，并明确是读一次后即可背诵。

× Definitely. I still remember that last year I planned to went to Korea, but when I arrived at the airport, I found that I forgot, forgot to forget to take my passport.

✓ Definitely. I still remember that last year I planned to go to Korea, but when I arrived at the airport, I found that I had forgotten to take my passport.

错误类型：过去时错误及时态混用。“planned to”后应接动词原形 go（不是 went）。描述过去发生并在另一过去之前完成的动作，应使用过去完成时 had forgotten，而不是简单过去的 forgot。句中还出现多余重复的“forgot to forget to”。建议：用 planned to go，且把 forgot 改为 had forgotten，去掉多余重复。

× And that's really.

✓ And that was really embarrassing.

错误类型：句子结构不完整。原句缺少补足信息，不能单独成为完整句。根据上下文应表达“那真的很尴尬/糟糕”，需补充形容词。建议：补全句子，如用“that was really embarrassing”或“that was really bad”。

× I still remember that when I was in the primary school.

✓ I still remember when I was in primary school.

错误类型：冠词使用不当。英语中一般说 attend primary school 或 in primary school，不加定冠词 the（除非指特定学校）。建议省略 the。

× What do you need to remember in your daily life? Well, I usually make a plane before the next day comes, so I always keep a schedule in my mind and I need to remember things such as when I should wake up and what I need to eat for breakfast, dinner or lunch.

✓ Well, I usually make a plan before the next day, so I always keep a schedule in my mind and need to remember things such as when I should wake up and what I should eat for breakfast, lunch, or dinner.

错误类型：句子结构及词语选择错误。“make a plane”应为“make a plan”；时间顺序和餐次表达顺序更自然为 breakfast, lunch, or dinner；不需要重复 I 在后半句。建议将 plane 改为 plan，调整餐次顺序并简化句子结构。

× I usually remember essential things by writing them down on a sticker or record them on my phone.

✓ I usually remember essential things by writing them down on a sticker or recording them on my phone.

错误类型：动词形式不一致。并列结构中应保持动词形式一致，前项为 writing（-ing），后项也应为 recording，而不是 record。建议：将 record 改为 recording。

× Additionally, I will also remind other people to tell me the things that I need to do, such as my parents and my friends.

✓ Additionally, I also ask other people, such as my parents and friends, to remind me about the things I need to do.

错误类型：代词/代词短语使用不当及句子表达不清。原句“remind other people to tell me”意思颠倒，应是请求他人提醒自己。建议重构为“ask other people... to remind me”并简化“my parents and my friends”为“my parents and friends”。