Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需更直接地回应问题，并避免不相关或混乱的信息。句子应更简洁、语法更准确，使用连接词组织细节。可以先给出明确的观点（Yes/No + 简短理由），然后举一两个具体例子。注意动词时态和名词单复数，以及短语用法（例如 “primary school” 而不是 “primary schools”， “play the guitar” 而不是 “play the guitars”）。

例: Yes, I’m reasonably good at memorising things because I often revise information soon after learning it. For example, when I learned a new song at school, I practised it every day for a week, which helped me remember the melody and chords.

提案: 回答要更流畅并纠正时态与表达。先直接回答（Yes），然后用过去时描述发生的事，给出原因和后果，并用连接词如 “because” 或 “so” 增强逻辑。避免模糊表述（例如 “maybe the last night I sleep till late” 应为 “because I slept late the night before”）。

例: Yes. Last month I missed a cinema appointment with my cousin because I slept late the night before and overslept. As a result, I felt bad and apologised to him afterwards.

提案: 回答应更清晰地列出具体需要记住的事项并使用正确的句子结构。开头用主题句概括，然后用连接词列举具体例子。注意名词搭配（e.g. “articles related to my major”, “research skills”）和句子顺序（不要出现不自然的短语如 “to how do the research”）。

例: I need to remember several daily tasks, especially study-related ones. For instance, I usually remember to read articles related to my major and to practice research skills such as data collection and literature review.

提案: 回答应更简洁并使用自然的表达描述方法。先给出主要策略（e.g. writing notes, using alarms），然后说明细节或例子。修正语法错误（“write down important things on paper”, “put the papers near my bed so I can see them when I wake up”, “set an alarm” 而不是 “make build a clock”）。

例: I usually write important tasks on paper and put the notes near my bed so I can see them when I wake up. I also set alarms on my phone to remind me of appointments or deadlines.

× I can remember some things in my primary schools.

✓ I can remember some things from my primary school.

句子中“primary schools”使用复数不合适，通常指自己上学的阶段用单数“primary school”或改为“primary schools”需明确指多个不同的学校。建议使用“from my primary school”或若指多所学校可说“from primary schools”。同时介词用“from”更自然：表示从何处记得。

× Maybe it's just I have a good relationship with my good friends and I can remember how we play the guitars or run it together.

✓ Maybe it's just that I have a good relationship with my friends and I can remember how we played the guitar or ran together.

句中缺少连词“that”，需要连接主句；“good friends”中“good”冗余可删；“play the guitars”不符合单数/集体表达，改为“played the guitar”或“played guitars”；“run it together”用法错误，应为“ran together”。时态应与回忆过去一致，使用过去式。建议注意连词、代词及动词时态和单复数匹配。

× Well, yes, just last month I forgot that I have an appointment with my cousin.

✓ Well, yes, just last month I forgot that I had an appointment with my cousin.

这句话叙述的是过去发生的事件，主句用过去式“forgot”，从句也应使用过去时态“had”来保持时态一致（间接引语时间后退）。建议在描述过去事件时，保持从句也使用过去式。

× We make an appointment to visit the movies together, but I forgot it maybe the last night I sleep till late.

✓ We made an appointment to go to the movies together, but I forgot because the night before I slept late.

原句中时态混乱（现在式和过去式混用）、搭配错误（“visit the movies”应为“go to the movies”）、逻辑连接不清（“maybe the last night I sleep till late”不合语序且时态错误）。建议使用一致的过去时并调整词序：原因状语放在句尾或用连接词“because”连接。

× Well, there are a lot of things need to remember immediately.

✓ Well, there are a lot of things that need to be remembered immediately.

原句缺少关系代词“that”引导定语从句，且“need to remember”在被动或主动结构上不流畅，常用被动“need to be remembered”或完整主动结构“I need to remember many things immediately”。建议补全从句并选用更自然的表达。

× For example, I need to read some articles with my majors or some skills that I need to learn to how do the research.

✓ For example, I need to read some articles related to my major or learn some skills on how to do research.

“with my majors”介词搭配错误，应为“related to my major”或“in my major”；“learn to how do the research”语序和结构错误，应为“learn how to do research”或“learn skills on how to do research”。建议使用正确的介词短语并调整动词不定式和疑问词顺序。

× Well, I will write down the important things in the papers and put the papers near my bed that I can see it when I just get up.

✓ Well, I will write down the important things on paper and put the papers near my bed so that I can see them when I get up.

“in the papers”不自然，改为“on paper”或“on the papers”；“that I can see it”中关系词用法和代词不一致，应使用目的状语“so that”并将“it”改为复数“them”；“when I just get up”用“just”位置不当，通常直接说“when I get up”。建议注意介词搭配、连接词和代词一致性。

× Sometimes I make build a clock to remind me that important things.

✓ Sometimes I build a clock to remind me of important things.

“make build”重复且不合语法，应选“build”；“to remind me that important things”中从句结构错误，提醒某事应用“remind me of + 名词”或“remind me that + 从句”。此处用“remind me of important things”更自然。建议去掉多余动词并使用正确的提醒结构。