Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting details. Avoid exaggeration and redundant phrases. Use a linking phrase to connect your explanation.

例: Yes, I am fairly good at remembering things. For example, classmates often say I have a photographic memory because I can recall details after seeing them only once. However, I don't always remember everything perfectly.

提案: Organize your reply with a clear topic sentence and use coherent examples. Correct grammatical mistakes and avoid vague fragments. Use linking words such as 'for instance' or 'for example' to list specific items.

例: Yes, I have. When I'm in a hurry I often forget essential items. For instance, I have left my umbrella, phone or wallet at home on several occasions because I was rushing to leave.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence and then explain one or two specific things you actively remember. Simplify long sentences, use correct verb forms, and include linking words like 'because' or 'so' for clarity.

例: I try to remember to slow down and be present in my daily life. Because I often rush, I regularly remind myself to breathe, enjoy the moment and take short breaks so I don't get overwhelmed.

提案: Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one clear method with a brief reason or example. Use correct tense and linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to show the effect of your method.

例: I make lists and put them where I can easily see them. For example, I write tasks on a sticky note on my door and check it before leaving, so I rarely forget important items.

× Yes, a lot of people, especially my classmates, always tell me that I have a photographic memory since I just need to look at something once and I instantly memorize it without needing to look back at it.

✓ Yes, a lot of people, especially my classmates, always tell me that I have a photographic memory because I only need to look at something once and I instantly memorize it without needing to look back.

Replace 'since' with 'because' for clear causal meaning in spoken answer; change 'just need' to 'only need' for natural phrasing; 'instantly memorize it without needing to look back at it' is corrected to remove redundant preposition 'at' after 'back'. Also pronoun usage 'it' refers to the thing and is fine; overall this improves clarity and naturalness.

× Dates, schedule and people know, but things, especially when I'm in a hurry, I usually forget things that I needed to bring that day, like umbrella, my phone, my wallet, things like that.

✓ Dates, schedules and people I know, but when I'm in a hurry I usually forget things that I need to bring that day, like an umbrella, my phone, my wallet, and so on.

Change 'schedule' to plural 'schedules' to match 'dates' and plural list; reorder 'people know' to 'people I know' to correct word order/pronoun use; change past 'needed' to present 'need' because question asks about ever forgetting important things generally; add article 'an' before 'umbrella'; add conjunction 'and' before 'so on' for natural listing.

× I always remind myself to take a breath, enjoy the present and take process from time to time since I tend to do everything fast-paced as if I'm always in a hurry or I always have a deadline so I needed that reminder to slow my pace down and just relax.

✓ I always remind myself to take a breath, enjoy the present and go through the process from time to time since I tend to do everything at a fast pace as if I'm always in a hurry or always have a deadline, so I need that reminder to slow my pace down and just relax.

Change 'take process' to 'go through the process' for correct verb-noun collocation; change 'fast-paced' to 'at a fast pace' to correctly modify 'do everything'; change past 'needed' to present 'need' because this is a habitual action; remove redundant 'I' before 'always have a deadline'; add comma before 'so' for clarity. These adjustments correct verb forms and improve sentence structure.

× I usually list things I needed to do for me to remember it and place it somewhere that I can easily see or look back. In that way it helps me not to miss anything that I needed to do.

✓ I usually list things I need to do to help me remember them and place the list somewhere I can easily see or check. That way it helps me not miss anything I need to do.

Change past 'needed' to present 'need' because describing habitual method; 'for me to remember it' becomes 'to help me remember them' to use correct infinitive purpose and pronoun agreement with plural 'things'; 'place it' changed to 'place the list' for clarity; 'look back' replaced with 'check' as a more natural collocation; final clause adjusted to present 'need' for consistency.