Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, phát âm và cấu trúc câu. Trả lời nên ngắn gọn, trực tiếp với câu chủ đề, sau đó thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: “every every”) và sửa lỗi như “the memorizing things” → “memorising things” hoặc “a. Her talent to memories” → “a natural talent for memorising”. Nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp như “retain”, “remember”, “store information”.

例: Yes, I'm quite good at memorising things. I have a natural talent for remembering facts from school, and I often retain new vocabulary by revising it several times.

提案: Cải thiện thì động từ, trật tự từ và cách diễn đạt ý rõ ràng. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes, I have), sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể với thì quá khứ đúng (forgot/cooked). Tránh các cấu trúc sai như “have to not rice to eat”. Thêm chi tiết ngắn gọn về hậu quả hoặc cảm xúc để làm phong phú câu trả lời.

例: Yes, I have. For example, once I forgot to cook rice for dinner, so my family and I had nothing ready to eat and we had to order food from outside. It was embarrassing and I learned to set a reminder.

提案: Sắp xếp câu rõ ràng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn và cụ thể. Sử dụng danh từ đúng (schedule → my study schedule/the schedule) và tránh lặp từ. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về nội dung lịch học (môn học, giờ học) và dùng liên từ (because, so, for example) để mạch lạc hơn.

例: I need to remember my study schedule. For instance, I have classes and revision sessions every weekend from 9 a.m. to 5 p.m., so I always check my timetable to avoid missing any lessons.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ chính xác trong diễn đạt. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu rõ phương pháp (write things down/repetition/use reminders) và đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (for example, then) và tránh cấu trúc sai như “have me remember longer”.

例: I usually write down important things and repeat them several times. For example, I write a task ten times and set a phone reminder, which helps me remember it for longer.

× I think I'm quite good at the memorizing things because I believe I have a. Her talent to memories.

✓ I think I'm quite good at memorising things because I believe I have a natural talent for remembering.

The student used incorrect word forms and extra words ('the', 'a.', 'Her', 'memories'). 'Memorising' does not need 'the' before it; use the gerund without article. 'A natural talent for remembering' uses adjective 'natural' and the correct gerund 'remembering' rather than the noun 'memories'. Clearer collocation improves fluency.

× Every every knowledge I learned in the school, I offered memories.

✓ Every piece of knowledge I learned at school, I memorised.

Redundant word 'Every every' and wrong noun phrase 'knowledge' requires a quantifier like 'piece of knowledge'. 'In the school' should be 'at school'. 'I offered memories' is incorrect — use the verb 'memorised'. The corrected sentence simplifies structure and uses correct collocations.

× Once I forget to cooked rice and after that I and my family have to not rice to eat.

✓ Once I forgot to cook rice and after that my family and I had no rice to eat.

Mixed and incorrect verb tenses: 'forget' (present) with 'cooked' (past). Use simple past 'forgot' and base verb 'cook'. 'Have to not rice to eat' is ungrammatical — express as 'had no rice to eat'. Keep past tense consistent.

× So I think it's a important thing that I was forgotten.

✓ So I think it was an important thing that I forgot.

Article 'a' before a vowel sound should be 'an'. 'I was forgotten' is passive and incorrect meaning — use active 'I forgot'. Keep tense consistent with past event.

× the thing that I need to remember in my daily life is my study schedule because I have many schedule to study all the days in the weekend in the, so I must remember all of it.

✓ The thing I need to remember in my daily life is my study schedule because I have many study sessions on the weekends, so I must remember all of them.

Use 'many' with countable noun 'schedules' or better 'many study sessions'. 'All the days in the weekend' is unnatural — 'on the weekends'. Pronoun agreement: 'all of it' should be 'all of them' to match plural 'sessions'. Article and word order adjusted.

× For me, I often write an thing that I need to remember many times and up to about 10 times I remember it and I think this way have me remember longer.

✓ For me, I often write down the things I need to remember many times, and after writing them about ten times I remember them; I think this method helps me remember longer.

'Write an thing' is wrong; use 'write down the things'. Use plural pronouns 'them' to match plural 'things'. 'Up to about 10 times I remember it' is awkward — express as 'after writing them about ten times I remember them'. 'This way have me remember' is ungrammatical; use 'this method helps me remember'. Use gerunds and verb agreement correctly.