Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (umm, uh) and correct basic grammar (use present simple: 'I'm not good at memorising', 'my memory is poor'). Use linking words like 'for example' to introduce specifics.

例: I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, I often forget small daily items such as my pen or shopping items because I don't have a set routine for remembering them.

提案: Provide a single clear example with chronological clarity and correct tense. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words ('for example', 'so', 'as a result') to make the story coherent. Mention the consequence briefly.

例: Yes, I have. For example, yesterday I left an important food package at home, so I had to call a locksmith to get back in, which caused me to be late for an appointment.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the most important item. Add a short supporting detail explaining why and use a linking word ('because' or 'so') to show consequence. Correct grammar: 'I usually leave my keys at home' and avoid exaggerations like 'UN inconvenient'.

例: The most important things I need to remember are my keys. I often leave them at home, which is inconvenient because it makes me late or forces me to ask someone to let me in.

提案: This answer is clear but needs grammatical accuracy and a little more detail. Use a concise topic sentence, then specify methods with linking words ('for example', 'also'). Correct plural/singular forms ('set reminders' not 'set a reminders') and reduce hesitation.

例: I usually set reminders on my phone and write notes in a notebook to remember important tasks. For example, I put alarms for appointments and list daily errands so I don't forget them.

× No, I'm not going to memorize these things because umm, my ability or memorising is a very bad.

✓ No, I'm not good at memorizing things because my ability to memorize is very bad.

The original uses awkward noun phrases and the adjective 'bad' incorrectly with 'is'. Replace 'not going to memorize' (future intention) with 'not good at memorizing' to answer skill question. Use 'ability to memorize' (correct preposition/structure) and 'very bad' after 'is' is acceptable but more natural: 'very bad' after 'is' with the corrected noun phrase. Remove filler sounds and redundant words. Suggestion: Use 'good at' + verb-ing to express skill and 'ability to + verb' for capability.

× I usually forget uh, my daily items are like cheese and pens.

✓ I usually forget my daily items, such as cheese and pens.

The original mixes clauses incorrectly: 'my daily items are like' is ungrammatical. Use a single clause 'I usually forget my daily items' then give examples with 'such as' or 'like'. Ensure plural agreement: 'pens' is fine; 'cheese' is uncountable so keep as is.

× Yes, I usually forget uh, important things uh, for example, yesterday I forgot my cheese uh, in my house uh, so that I need to called, uh, unlock a service which caused my.

✓ Yes, I usually forget important things. For example, yesterday I forgot my cheese at home, so I needed to call an unlock service which caused me problems.

Tense and verb forms were incorrect: 'need to called' should be past: 'needed to call'. Use 'forgot' correctly in past. Preposition: 'at home' is correct for location. 'Unlock service' needs an article 'an'. End phrase 'caused me problems' fixes incomplete clause. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistent when describing past events.

× MMM my keys are the most important items I need to uh, remember I usually left my key at home, which uh, is a very UN inconvenient.

✓ My keys are the most important items I need to remember. I often leave my keys at home, which is very inconvenient.

Mix of tenses and number: 'I usually left' is past but context requires a habitual present: use 'I often leave' or 'I usually leave'. 'My key' should be plural to match 'keys' or be consistent: 'my keys' and 'leave my keys'. 'UN inconvenient' is an incorrect negative prefix and spacing; use 'very inconvenient'. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× MMM, I usually uh, set a reminders or write a note on my notebook to remember important schedules or, uh, tasks.

✓ I usually set reminders or write a note in my notebook to remember important appointments or tasks.

Article and verb form errors: 'set a reminders' mixes singular article with plural noun — use 'set reminders' or 'set a reminder'. Preposition: 'in my notebook' is correct rather than 'on'. 'Schedules' is better as 'appointments' or 'schedules' but use plural consistency. Use base verb forms 'set' and 'write' for habits. Remove fillers.